A Quiet Summer Day

             On a quiet summer day I take a walk in the park
                 All I can hear is birds sing and dogs bark
            A sharp breeze causes me to roll down my sleeves
                  Uplifting a tornado of dirt and old leaves
                  The sun hides itself and the air turns dry
                  I begin to realize how fast life passes by
                  What starts as a journey turns into a drift
                  What we take for granted turns into a gift
                 As I watch a group of kids run and play tag
         I start reflecting on moments I wish I could take back
                  Days which start with your friends at school
           But end with you walking back home from the pool
                And months that would feel longer than years
             When you laughed your eyes would fill with tears
       But the best part was there wasnt any tension or worry
   And you were taught not to stress when the future got blurry
           But as I finish reflecting and gathering my thoughts
             I continue walking home along the trail of rocks
            As I look up and notice the sky beginning to dim
          I realize I'll experience those moments never again

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Hmmm, this was interesting! Interesting and intriguing.
I liked the way how the atmosphere of your poem changed as the poem progressed. I didn't think that there was anything wrong with the flow of it. Your poem had a really nice feel to it. I liked it! =)
~PaperHearts

[D. Pesek]

I didn't think there were any issues with the flow, well done.

[Rainbow Rider]

Excellent thoughts conveyed, although a bit off kilter with the flow. Enjoyable read nonetheless.