Desires Collide

Desires Collide

A Poem by Jock Engelman

I see a friend in need;
I wish I could help him indeed;
But we are no longer children;

I see the scars and the pain;
I could free him from the chains;
But he twists and resists alone;

This frightens even my cold heart;
Knowing like me, one day, he'll depart;
But this fear of loss chills my bones;

Above all this I wish a long life to him;
Yet knowing truly I hope to sing a hymn;
From six feet under before I sing for him;

© 2013 Jock Engelman


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deep sadness in this. When we lose that ability to reach out - because we've grown up and apart.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The most chilling verse, Jock, was the final verse. In fact, the whole thing was spine-chilling! Love this! Keep the works coming!

TLWA

p.s. Keep on the lookout for a new story coming soon!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jock Engelman

10 Years Ago

Shall do TLWA as I enjoy reading your work and your reviews. Also on the final verse I wanted to le.. read more
conveys despair from a person who can't help their friend. sometimes they just push away the ones who care about them most and we can't do anything about it. great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jock Engelman

10 Years Ago

Thank you mockingbird. I always appreciate your reviews
This expresses a lot in a compact form. It seems deep and dark to me. This is a good poem, structurally I believe it could be broken up a little for aesthetics but purely content, I wouldn't change anything.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SlightlyOdd

10 Years Ago

Specifically between stanzas three and four and stanzas nine and ten
Jock Engelman

10 Years Ago

I have edited the piece is this what you had in mind?
SlightlyOdd

10 Years Ago

yes. it is exactly what I had in mind.

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Added on October 27, 2013
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Tags: death, loss, friendship, six feet under

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Jock Engelman
Jock Engelman

Newcastle, New South Wales, Australia



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I am a guy who has gone through a lot over the years, i have many illnesses which i manage quite well. But i am still riddled with many demons. I was bullied for many years, so now i use my years of t.. more..

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