400 METRES

400 METRES

We,

The Runners of Dreams,

On this circular

Track of Time.

Crouched, determined and poised.

All,

Awaiting a single sign.

 

With a clap

Of wooden boards;

Our muscles kick into

Gear.

As our Hearts galumph

Forward,

Our fresh bodies towing

The Rear.

 

Life’s Four Hundred Metres,

Is shorter than it seems.

But People Drop Out,

Bonds break out at their seams.

Some Friends speed ahead,

While Enemies tread close.

Temptations obstruct,

Trying to catch Us by the

Toes.

 

Steeplechase through the

Challenges.

Overtake your Pacesetter.

Sprint with all your power,

And your progress’ll get better.

 

At the Final 100M,

You’ll be breathless

And fatigued

Never look

Backwards:

At your Side is

All you need.

 

Embrace your pace,

Don’t mind your Time.

And when at the End-

You’ll finish in Style!

 

-M.Babu-

Reviews

[deeps]

I so loved the 3rd stanza in this. SO much truth. So nicely done as well. Enjoyed reading this write.

[SINDE]

Writing mojo? Simplicity is nice as displayed by your piece .Life's 400 metres. Plus it's packed with relevance :)

[Nastia]

funny how we rarely think of life in that way. it really is a race. beautiful

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. I was a runner for many years. I ran the long events. I like the emotion and desire in this poem. It is amazing how we feel stronger and faster when we see the finish line. A very strong ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Sukriti Suki]

wow....life is a race, so I have heard many times..But it has never been described so beautifully and eloquently. Wonderful. At your side is all you need..Nice

[lifesmith]

MOJO seal of approval!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I really really liked a lot another fave of yours



100/100

[Jake Staffeld]

I like the analogy between track and life.Lots of people do sports, which makes the point easy to get a hold of. Nicely done!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

You got your mojo with this one. You take us on the marathon of life my friend.