The pain that remain

The pain that remain

A Poem by XIV.I
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What it feels like being alone and hurt.

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I see darkness, 
I see torture,
I see pain.
I see my shattered heart, 
I see myself crying in the dark.
Involuntarily rocking back and forth,
hugging my knees to my chest,
on the floor.
Fear has outrun me.
Afraid to leave.
Afraid to speak.

Hardly breathing.
Chest tingling.
Tears falling.
I am scared.
Am I dying?
Am I being abandon?
Where's everyone?
Why is everyone leaving?
Please don't go.
I want to see light again.

© 2018 XIV.I


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Love this piece!
The simplistic sentence structure matched with the agonizing cries for help are saddening in a way I can sympathize with.
The ending line is also perfectly done, simple, but meaningful!

Great work! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Writing is a great way to soothe the darkness-- it always works for me, anyway. And, if you let it, it'll lead you toward the light. Very visual and intense, in my opinion, and I enjoyed the ending, "Please don't go. I want to see light again." I know the feeling very well

Posted 6 Years Ago


You can feel the pain and fear in your poem. Every detail like a stroke on a canvas painting for the reader a visual portal of this moment in your life. A poem filled with deep emotion.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Expressing how you feel
Is exactly how to deal
With your inner pain
So you can live again

Thank you for your thoughts and keep expressing them.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on January 4, 2018
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Tags: Pain, Darkness

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XIV.I
XIV.I

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