Another chance

Allow yourself to fall in love again after a heartbreak.

ANOTHER CHANCE

There she was adoring him,

Wanting to see him happy,

She wanted to erase all his pains.

And he was so stubborn,

 He cried but in front of her managed to keep a smile on his face.

Him and his broken heart

She wanted to fix,

Wanted to see him happy once again,

She never bothered to be his next pick.

She smiled and laughed the brightest in front of him,

He too smiled but his eyes were dim,

Holding something in his hand he walked away looking at it,

She stood there alone thinking how to repair his broken strings,

She didn't give up and stood next to him,

Her faith of making him happy quivered,

She saw him shedding tears holding a ring.

She didn't want to make him alarmed,

Without letting him know she was gone,

She suffocated and suffered for every tear he sheds,

She was unaware of the facts which lied ahead.

He was broken but didn't want to let her know,

Why doesn't he express his feelings? 

What is that he couldn't let go?

She shivered in cold that night,

Unaware that he was watching her,

Now she hid her tears and smiled in front of him,

She knew the pain of a broken heart

She suffered and so couldn't bear to see anyone else suffering.

That's why she wanted to see him happy,

That was the stop for her eternal journey.

He was broken too,

But neither of them didn't know.

His hands had the cuts of the blade 

A girl left him leaving him and his heart ailed.

He was scattered and was left alone.

He wished he died than to live in that pain,

She sighed and thought once she felt the same.

Both were a perfect match 

Only if they could see,

They cared about each other

Forever they wanted to be.

Both were surprised for their past story they hold,

They realised it was gone in past and now they have to be bold.

Holding each other's hand,

She was in glee,

He smiled now how once she wanted him to be.

He felt warm by her care and concern. 

She felt relieved she could erase a person's pain,

She smiled seeing him smile once again.

He said her concern made him drawn towards her,

She is unique,

He felt thankful for that person who let her go,

She was happy for she has managed to mend his broken strings,

She felt like the luckiest girl ever when he expressed his feelings,

Their relationship of care and concern was a first stage of love,

They felt they were on top of the world,

They felt so above.

They were happy only coz they noticed a door of happiness, 

Rather than to still mourn for their loss,

They had hope and gave love another chance.

Reviews

[boygene borice]

so beautiful,wonderful. I love the scene created within this poem :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much Sir. Feeling widely elated to know that. ☺

[AshlynnStyx]

Its so good. Powerful, honest and strongly subjective.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. Feeling really happy to know that you liked it.

[AshlynnStyx]

You're welcome

[Ashish]

So so good...
Really..m speechless...
What I read , I will say a story which has all the emotions. The girl & the boy are lucky.. That destiny let them meet.

Sometimes it's better to give a second chance in life...

Thanks for sharing buddy :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

Oh my goodness..
I'm just left speechless here dear...
I can't say anything...
It is so relatable to me...
Again I loved this and am speechless now .........

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :) I feel really happy.

[Anindita Janhabee]

my pleasure

[Emily]

Love this!!
Keep on writing!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

It is filled with emotions and truth..each para has its own feeling..and i just like to say, keep writing and sharing..i really enjoy your work...good luck for further works.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[SZHZIA]

It is also filled with true emotions and sorrow. It seems to me every line comes from the depth of poet's heart. I enjoy the whole poem and the essence of honest feelings and love. Nice job.

Best
Szhzia

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :)

[SZHZIA]

was my pleasure and you are welcome. You did nice job :-)

[Valentine]

A trifle jumpy. Your idea comes through but not the best topic to dwell on as a reader. Valentine

[Njeri Brooks]

This poem was packed full of emotion and meaning as usual.

However, proof reading is your best friend. There were a few lines where I couldn't make sense of it without stopping to reread them.

"He wished he died than to live in that pain," and the following line felt like you were trying to force the rhyme.

"She felt the luckiest girl ever when he expressed his feelings" was a line were you left out the word "like".

"She suffered and so couldn't see anyone else suffering" was very wordy. I had to reread it. You could've said "she suffered and was blind to others' suffering".

"But either of them didn't know." I feel like this should've said 'neither' instead of 'either'.

Those were just a few mistakes I saw.

Despite that, I REALLY liked the overall concept of finding love from mere companionship. :)

The story started off with a bittersweet atmosphere, but it had a sugar sweet ending.

Nice job with this one, but just remember: "proof reading is your best friend."

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you :) I've corrected the mistakes