Last wish

Last wish

A Poem by Najam Us Saher
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I am yours in heaven.

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LAST WISH
My love, Do you remember the first time my sight caught yours?
I was so blushed, I couldn't move along.
My love, Do you remember the first time we met?
I love how your eyes were glued to mine.
My love, Do you remember the day you said you loved me?
You made me cry. I knew that already.
My love, why are you so quiet?
I am still alive.
Tell me something,
I know I am going to die.
Let you be my diversion,
For I know not the time I may leave you in seclusion.
Probably this might be the last day of us my love,
Let me lie in your arms for the last time.
My love, answer now the question I have asked all my life,
I have always asked you why me? 
Knowing that you wanted me to be your wife.
My love, I am alive and well today,
You see I am still blabbering,
The same way when we first met,
Oh my love, I am dying to see you smile.
I always wanted to live my entire life with you,
But it seems that my time is overdue,
I want you to stay happy,
For I am always with you.
This is how always I wanted to die my love,
I want you near me.
For I could tell you that I loved you till my last breath,
I could tell you that I have fulfilled all my promises,
But you promise me my love,
To cherish the days we spent together,
Don't kill yourself after I go.
Promise me that you'll look and see me,
I will be there at that sky numbered seven,
For only if you promise me to continue your life,
I will try my best to meet you in heaven. 




© 2017 Najam Us Saher



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This piece inspired me. You composed it in simple language. I like it

Thanks for sharing. :-)

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Szhzia

Posted 4 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

4 Months Ago

I am so happy to see you. You closed down your profile I wondered that you will never come again. I .. read more
SZHZIA

4 Months Ago

You are welcome, I was busy in my work.
:-)
Your poetry is so simple yet astoundingly beautiful. I find I never get tired of reading it. Another job well done.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

Oh thank you so much :) you've made my day.
I just love reading your poems! They are filled with emotions :)

keep writing :D

Posted 7 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
Death; the romantic dream for most of us when we realize we've reached out end or think about it. Love; the romantic way of saying no matter what, pain and misery may follow to death, but death never parts souls as long as they know what they wish for is what truly makes them happy. Great job.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
I'm more a dark port but I thought this piece was nice there are a few errors and your sentence structure needs some work but over all it was lovely well done

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

I am trying my best to improve. Thank you for reading :)
very touching

"Do you remember the first time my sight caught yours?"
...I love that


thank you for sharing
J

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

You're welcome infact I thank you for reading and letting me know. ☺
Jenny

8 Months Ago

hahaha youre so welcome it was my pleasure ;)
This was emotional packed.

I felt like the lack of certain punctuation such as commas really lead to this piece feeling rushed.

It makes me wonder if you did so in order to add more tangible depth to the mc's impending death.

In addition to that, I noticed that at the very beginning you said, "Do you remember the day you said that you love me?"

However, it should have said, " Do you remember the day you said you loved me?"

Overall, this was a very bitter sweet poem about "tying up loose ends" and leaving your loved ones behind.

~~N. Brooks

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much :) I'll just correct the errors.
wow wow wow
how can you be so much in love
beautiful one

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Oh my god...by reading only this poem you have said this I wonder what will you say after reading al.. read more
Nicely written. It is full of sadness and heart break that shadows the life when we realise that the person whom we love is no longer going to be with us in our life but there is a hope at the end that we can meet that person in our after life.Deep heartfelt poem.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much you have understood the exact meaning I wanted to express. I am glad that you like.. read more
Wow. This is sad. Is it about a wife who got some incurable disease or something and has a short time to live? Or is it about the general case when a close spouse dies and then one becomes lonely and grieving. Sad indeed but a harsh truth as well. I am both impressed and made melancholy by the clear feeling and emotion evoked by this piece.

I am a relatively young guy myself and I can hardly get my head around what it means to lose your lover after spending a lifetime together. This poem does what a good poem should be able to do: give humans an experience that they do not already possess. Very heart-felt and well-written.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Yes you have guessed right. I have left all the imagination to the reader they are free to think any.. read more

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Added on February 11, 2017
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Najam Us Saher
Najam Us Saher

Hyderabad, India



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