Lively death

LIVELY DEATH

I see fog everywhere,

It resembles my confused mind,

I am standing on a cliff,

Still I don't feel high.

You are along with me crossing the bridge,

On these high and risky mountain cliffs.

I may lose you I fear,

I am glad you are here,

The cold wind shivers me,

Still I can't feel that warmth of you being near me.

I may lose you while crossing the path,

We took this risk to prove our love,

I look at you, I shed a tear,

This is not about facing our fears.

Time is little and here we stand,

I jumped down the cliff holding your hand.

Now I don't fear losing you,

I am sorry I couldn't survive being away from you,

I am sorry that I didn't let you live,

Here we are, falling down the cliff.

I am glad I loved you till the end,

At last, I became weak to bear life's bend,

Again I feel solaced in presence of nature,

I feel happy we die seeing each other.

Maybe we will be happy then,

After we die, till the very end. 

Reviews

[AshlynnStyx]

Its very dark but its pretty accurate. At least where life is concerned. No mistakes good job.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad that you understood. Thank you so much ☺

[Stacy Purvis]

Sounds like life's journey. Thank you for sharing.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much ☺

[Darling]

I love this. It is just a lovely tragedy. What a way to die. I could not stop thinking after I read if of couples with such a lovely ending such as Mark Antony and Cleopatra and Romeo and Juliet. Thanks for Sharing. Darling.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am glad that you understood it. ☺

[Sikandar Khan]

Saher So Nice....................

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. Feeling truly happy to know that you liked it. ☺

[Abhishek Asthana]

M bit connected when I was going through... it's bit emotional !!
That's one of ur intense creation

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes. Thank you so much for your kind visit. I appreciate it ☺

[Gone]

i dont rly see this as a death. i see it as a girl who was going though a lot but didnt say anything to her loved1 until the very end; where sh dragged him down to see wht she was going through so he could help.
regardless, this was a very excellent piece and one of my favourites

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes I am glad to know that you have understood it. Thank you so much. ☺

[CAPOLAVORO]

As I try to review some of your writings, I really noticed that it always has a hint of negativeness on it. hehe oh well dear, you keep that inspiration going cause this one is pretty amazing. I just like thing that talks with death sometimes. It gives us an image to love it than to be afraid of it. I believe the process is like this. So slow yet so fascinating. Death comes with love then comes with knowing life more than what you use to.
"At last, I became weak to bear life's bend,
Again I feel solaced in presence of nature,
I feel happy we die seeing each other."
I love this line because it gives me a powerful image of wind blowing and soft fragrant smell of bodies falling into a realm that would always be considered free and shown.

[Abraham George]

You are so cruel. She is saying about suicide and you said you like that?

I wont let her died . she is waiting for her love and i know one day she will be successful in her love.
MASTERPIECE please pray for her successful romantic life and not for her Suicide mission

[Najam Us Saher]

Capolavoro I am glad to know that you liked it. Abraham George don't worry I will die when my time comes.

[Abraham George]

Najam i am teasing CAPOLAVORO

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh! okay...

[wordman]

sad write,the demons in her mind has pulled both of them down,but she realizes at the end the truth of sorts

[Najam Us Saher]

True...the demons are my negative thoughts....Thank you so much for reading.

[Cae]

I really loved this one. It hits close to home with what I'm going through right now.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad to know that it was relatable. Thank you so much for your kind visit. I appreciate it ☺

[Long Whispers]

This one is amazing! I enjoyed the emotional ride it depicts.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I feel truly happy to know that you liked it. ☺