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Fish bowl

Fish bowl

A Poem by Najam Us Saher


FISH BOWL
O' beauty of my bowl,
Do you like living there?
O' you tiny soul,
If you don't want to stay; break away.
 
O' little fish gliding in exuberance,
How do you live happily?
O' small life of innocence,
Teach me your way.

O' fragile fish, you capture my attention, 
Doesn't your beauty fade away?
O' fish of my admiration,
There is nothing less about you to say.

O' joyful soul; mini delight, 
Why are you going away?
O' pleasure of my sight,
Guide me thy way. 



© 2017 Najam Us Saher



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It is also filled with emotion like your other poem... I love it. Thanks for sharing Najam :-)

Posted 6 Days Ago


Najam Us Saher

5 Days Ago

You never fail to make me happy by your kind words. Thank you very much. ☺
SZHZIA

5 Days Ago

pleasure... You are welcome.. :-)
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Dee
A creatively expressive poem with heartfelt really down to earth emotions. That touches the heart. And make you think. With a smile on your face.

Posted 6 Days Ago


Dee

6 Days Ago

MY pleasure sweetheart of late so been into myself. I lost me. But trying to help others again. You .. read more
Najam Us Saher

6 Days Ago

I agree with your words. Just like you I write to make myself feel better. I pour my emotions out.
Dee

6 Days Ago

It does help. Keep expressing yourself. And you will grow also and learn like Iam more about yoursel.. read more
Beautiful amazing and creative writing... Really loved it

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much for reading :)
O' what a creative writing, reminds me of the time when I had a fish ball back then..
Your lines about a simple fish ball made them feel special.

Thank you again for sharing such a beautiful writing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much, I am extremely happy that my poem made you remember some good memories, Also, I.. read more
Joey Nizz

9 Months Ago

your welcome and yes It gave me some good memories of my mini aquarium, it used to have the best loo.. read more
I remember that I was obsessed with fishes😅😅 thank you for writing this. It's beautiful!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

I am happy that you can relate as well. I thank you so much for reading ☺
Anjali

9 Months Ago

You are welcome.
It's amazing! The little pleasures of life are actually the best and true ones...

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

I wholeheartedly agree with you. Thank you so much 😊
Watching the fishes and admiring their beauty and the small yet and incredibly wonderful life has been some of the things I've really loved as a kid, and I still do..That experience is very Serene and soothing😊

Small may this bowl be, and little are those beautiful creatures inside it, but that shows a complete Living ecosystem alive, an ecosystem which is indispensable without water, and an environment that can teach us a lot, if we wish too!

Thankyou for sharing this poem, Najam.Your poem is as beautiful as the little lovely creatures in the fish bowl, that never fails to me us smile thoughtfully.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

I am overwhelmed to hear that you can relate as well. I also liked admiring the fishes when I was a .. read more
Saumya

9 Months Ago

Very true!😊 & I agree.
The kind of happiness it was to be around that cute little fish bow.. read more
This is really good...and something to learn from...I got the message.. loved it

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

I am happy that this poem could help you. You have my greatest gratitude. ☺
Reaching for your poetic heights here, Najam.

I enjoyed the write and the theme; a kind of Keatsian ode to a fish bowl and it's inhabitant; very inventive. Perhaps use apostrophe after each 'O' or exclamation to give the letter greater force and impact, as if you are throwing your plea of beauty upon the universe.

A write of simplicity with grasp reaching for the stars of language. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much, I did think about using an apostrophe but I read a poem in which it was not wri.. read more
A feel good poem from you. This one is refreshing to read.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

I am grateful that you found it to be refreshing. Thank you very much ☺

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