Changing seasons

Changing seasons

A Story by Najam Us Saher
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I feel alone, faithfully deceived by love

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     The feeling of love can be enchanting like the first snowfall after a hot summer. The warmth one feels covers one's heart with concern and begins the season for love. 
     It all starts with concern, care and a bond of friendship between the two. I know that feeling very well because that's what how I found the person I love. 
      Among all the boys, it was destined for me to love him, he loved me in return. Everything was perfect as we loved each other truly and wanted to get married. All my previous sadness faded away with his affection for me. My heart which was cold and broken into pieces he made me believe in myself and made me feel the warmth of love.
     Happiness never stayed with me for long, my parents didn't agree for our marriage and told me not to be in contact with him. All my happiness faded away, day by day I felt worse. I waited for a miracle to happen and change the situation. It never happened, all got even worse. 
    He pleaded me to stay, while I got no other option to go away. I told him there is no future for us anymore. He believes in himself and still tries to make one. My euphoria flowed like a waterfall and now it was still. I could feel no other emotion than to be lost in our memories and dwell. 
     I feel alone, faithfully deceived by love. 
Where has the spring of love which bloomed in my heart gone? 
Where is the hope that arouse in me for a perfect life gone? 
Many questions haunt me, I have no answer to them. After all, I have once again been a culprit of love. 
What is worse than not to be with the one you love? 
    All the smiles, laughter faded away. All that is left is tears  that my heart sends me to remind me of my love. My heart aches to accept that all the wishes we wished together blew away like a harsh wind of winter. 
    People say that sometimes life doesn't give you what they want, I feel life always doesn't give me what I truly want. So for now, I look back at the days when the rain of love splashed my heart and I fell for him, how we together enjoyed the rainy days. 
    Since four years, I am blessed to spend the changing seasons along with him. I have witnessed the rain, falling of leaves and the flowering of trees along with him. While he stood beside me when I cried, when I felt low, when I was happy enough to make him happy too. Despite, the changing seasons I cannot change my heart. After all that has happened, I look back to see how the feeling of love changed my view about it. 
    I feel love is like the winter, it can be beautiful and peaceful, but also cruel and cold. 

 


© 2017 Najam Us Saher



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Ne
I am touched by the words you have wrote, I could never imagine being forced to turn away from the one you love like that. For me personally, I would probably cry if this happened to me. Your work is beautiful please continue writing.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

Yeah I will, thank you very much for such heartfelt review. It means a lot :)
Ne

1 Month Ago

No problem, I feel that's other writers deserve to get reviews just like anyone else....
Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

I feel the same, there are many writers whose beautiful poems often are unviewed. There is so much t.. read more
Story is impeccably written. No words:) your story already said all.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much. It means a lot 😀
Shweta

1 Month Ago

Ur welcome:)
This is a beautiful piece! I really enjoyed reading this: job well done :)

What I appreciated the most about this story was the reality of it. This is something that happens in true life to so many people, and the way you described the different emotions, worries, and doubts that came into play, it is very believable. You take the reader with you on this journey.

Of course, I think this story has the potential of expansion: there are a lot of details that are missing and I'm wondering what exactly happened. Perhaps you could even write a whole novel around it. You have a plotline you can work with that way. Something to think about ;)

There were some minor grammatical errors. Nothing too big. A quick reread should be enough to find them and fix them.

Thank you for submitting this story into my contest. It was an excellent read! Keep writing!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

I am very bad in writing stories and constructing dialogues. Your prompt made me write this. I will .. read more
You said you are not good in constructing sentence. i think this is your first story here and i will say this is a beautiful piece of work.

The emotions are beautifully narrated and the words using are so good. You have the talent to write more. Please please

Posted 1 Month Ago


Najam Us Saher

1 Month Ago

I have written few other stories too, which are my emotions. I cannot write dialogues. Really.
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Najam Us Saher
Najam Us Saher

Hyderabad, India



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Some people want to live long so that they are remembered for a long time, I want to live a little and want to be remembered forever. All the noises in my head, all the words unsaid, all the emotio.. more..

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