Blessing and a lesson

Blessing and a lesson

A Poem by Najam Us Saher
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You wanted to stay when I decided to leave after waiting for so long.

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BLESSING AND A LESSON
I needed you so bad,
I wanted to meet you,
But I was not your priority.
I wanted to forget you,
I gathered courage within myself and I did,
I distanced myself from you,
But you never did. 
My heart throbbed in pain 
When I was away from you,
My eyes poured rain
When I couldn't see a future for us. 
I missed you and knew that you did too,
Nights, I spent sleepless,
Thinking you spent the same way,
It took me time,
To move on,
I gathered courage and I did.
One fine day, 
You appeared,
I couldn't meet your eyes,
And my heart whispered 'too late'

I struggled,
I was restless,
You lived,
While I felt breathless,
I wanted to die,
You wanted me to live a life along with you,
I cried,
You suffered in silence,
I died,
Because of the situations.
I became weak,
You were my only strength,
As you were gone,
I learnt how to be independent.
One fine day, you came.
My heart skipped a beat,
I wanted to end the game.
You asked for a chance,
But now I wasn't the same.
You suffered,
My eyes shed tears,
You were helpless,
I felt the same too,
You came,
When I wanted to leave,
I felt bad, a chance, I couldn't give,
All the promises, all the believes,
Came to an end and I feel deceived.
Love, once again I couldn't receive
And I am left here in tormented memories, to grieve. 


© 2017 Najam Us Saher



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Zoe
Very relatable, this is exactly what happens. I loved the way you ended the first stanza. Well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading this.
Zoe

5 Months Ago

A pleasure
wow, This was good, I love how you told a whole story in the poem.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Months Ago

Thank you very much, I am glad that you liked it :)
I really enjoyed this poem, and I’m looking forward to reading more of your pieces. I'm kind of new on here and it would be an honor if you can review my 4 new recent poems. (The world is ours, Nostalgia, Paradise, and You)

Thank you and Keep up the Good work!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

Sure, I will. Thank you very much for taking the time to read my poems. It means a lot.
I adore the emotions shown in this piece, but I would have liked it more if it had a bit more of a rhythm to the rhyme.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

9 Months Ago

Okay, I get it. Thank you very much for such honest review, much appreciated.
Such a empowering and beautiful read it is! I enjoyed reading this.. your words are placed in the perfect Manner and the emotions and the structure everything! Just amazing!!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

I am widely elated to know that you liked this, thank you so much :)
Anjali

10 Months Ago

You are very welcome!
No matter how much one tries, how dedicated they are towards others, there naturally are some relationships that don't last long.... Regardless of how hard we try to bring it back, it's never the kind of comfortable we wish and want it to be, maybe because it's not actually meant to be.

Sometimes, it's hard, but better to accept people and situations as they are, and not force it to be.If it's meant to be, it definitely will be, maybe later, maybe after years.But if it's not meant to be, it will never be, no matter how much we try. Sometimes moving on feels better than holding on, specially when the other person makes us feel unwanted, because waiting in such cases is worthless and it indeed hurts.


Thankyou for writing and sharing this lively poem Najam, the simplicity and the intense emotions in your words made it a very relatable piece for me.
Sad, yet a wonderful piece!😊

Well done!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

Your words make me feel happy about the decision I made. You are absolutely right, some relationship.. read more
Saumya

10 Months Ago

You're most welcome, Najam😊
Take care.
Ah, but of course, they have a knack of returning mostly when we decide to move on, and the ability to turn the tables around... It never helps being dependent on someone for your emotional stability and happiness... Nice write, Najam. And very relatable...

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

You are absolutely right, when everything seems to run smoothly something happens that disturbs it. .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

You're welcome :)
Beautiful Poem, Najam jee.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much.
Thank you as always for entering your piece.

I really liked this, it tells a story and keeps the reader interested until the end. It is a shame however that it is not a happy ending but that is the risk one takes with love no matter what age or time in life, it is always a leap into the unknown.

I liked this line in particular:
My eyes poured rain

Thank you, again

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

I thank you very much for reading ☺
This one is heartbreaking...
I really like the story in it..

Posted 10 Months Ago


Najam Us Saher

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much :)

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