Dandelions

Dandelions

A Poem by Moon's fairest daughter
"

(Translations in the author's note)

"
   You gave me dandelions,
   and I
   vased them in my yellow typewriter...
   They kept company to the 
   drizzling sunshine,
   and the talkative alphabets... 

   In the dense summer air, 
   I bathed my soul, 
   and dreamt of timemachine wheels,
   that revolved with blurred spokes....
          
                         They call you the lovelorn boy,
                                poisoned by Summer's sweet foolery.
                                     They call me the dandelion girl,
                                          fooled by Summer's sweet poison...

   You said love is a 
   full blown rainshower
   that conjures the wand'ring stars,
   and makes them stand.
   You said it was in the
   Summer's hot breath
   that melts away the standing frosts
   of long Winter...

   You spoke of lies and truths,
   of untruths and half-truths.
   And I was certain,
   I was most certain of rebirths
   and future encounters...
          Like the final act of magic,
              we were bound to unite again........

   ~Twin fortune gazers~
   We looked up 
   at the teacup of stars,
       and saw shapes forming........ 

                         All the while, the Wind dances amongst the dandelions
                                  like a belladonna, enthralled.......

   I always could make out Orion,
   but you found even
   Vega, Deneb, and Altair.....
        Warmed by the fire
          of the atmosphere,
            we sat up all night,
              to watch them fade.......
 
                        All the while, the Rain stirs the grass blades
                                 to its haunting symphony.......

   If I could have trusted the
   truth of sleep,
   and of dreams, and stars-
   typing a printwork of destiny
   with sluggish typewriter notes,
   I could have read our cards...


   You called me  ياقمر
   ~~my moon~~
   Your voice raining, 
   like sunflakes, and snowshine, melting
   like the skin of peach kept in
   rosewater for too long, dissolving
   into sweet nothingness...


   Thrice adream,
   through fantasy lands,
   we sailed
   on our magic carpet
   across the bridge of the Milky Way...

   Our hearts dancing in the wind,
   like the yellow butterflies
      ~como las mariposas amarillas~
   that fly through moon-kissed fields....                                     

                        You gave me dandelions,
                    and I
           vased them in my heart...
   ~Pour tous les saisons à s'épanouir~

















© 2017 Moon's fairest daughter



Author's Note

Moon's fairest daughter
This is one of my favourite poems, the one I treasure the most...it has taken me nearly two years to shape it and edit it to bring out this final version

Notes:
1. Vased- I created this verb form of the noun "vase", so the meaning is literal, not figurative.

2. The 3 stars-Vega, Deneb, and Altair form the Summer Triangle. The 3 are the brightest stars in the three constellations of Aquila, Cygnus, and Lyra, respectively.
The general tale is a love story between Zhinü (織女; the weaver girl, symbolizing the star Vega) and Niulang (牛郎; the cowherd, symbolizing the star Altair). Their love was not allowed, thus they were banished to opposite sides of the Silver River (symbolizing the Milky Way Galaxy). Once a year, on the 7th day of the 7th lunar month, a flock of magpies would form a bridge over the star, Deneb, to reunite the lovers for one day.

3. The translation for ياقمر is "oh moon" or "oh precious" in arabic(in the egyptian dialect).
It is written as "ya amar", pronounced as "ya kamar"

4. I made up the words "sunflakes" and "snowshine" from "sunshine" and "snowflakes"...I think they sit nicely on the tongue and give the poem a playful feel...
From "sunflakes", I get the imagery of falling gilded flakes of sunlight in my mind...and from "snowshine", I wanted to highlight the glint of the snow as it falls...

5. Como las mariposas amarillas -translates to "like the yellow butterflies"

6. Pour tous les saisons à s'épanouir- translates to "for all seasons to bloom"

I have always wanted to experiment with multiple languages in a single poem...if you have any suggestions, I would be honoured to receive them...I think this poem can go through another edit, and so all suggestions are welcome!

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

That was a pleasure to read. This was very skillfully crafted and is nothing short of a work of art! I have a few favorite lines and I won't pollute the comments with them but I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. "All the while, the wind dances amongst the dandelions like a belladonna, enthralled..." Ok, I had to take one line out of it ha. Beautiful work!

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

The exquisite nature of your tongue exemplifies the artistic nature of your talent and skill. This write is a treasure of a lifetime, filled with the jewel of words, the symphony of ideas, the soul & mind of feminine genius. A masterpiece!

Regards,
Al

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


wowie wowie woah fantastico

Posted 3 Months Ago


Your art means much girl!❤😍 goooo on friend!😍😍😍💞💞💞💞

Posted 3 Months Ago


[send message][befriend] Subscribe
M
I would not change anything. The hope, the love this piece inspires escapes any expression I know.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

One of the tests of a poem for me is how it sounds when read aloud. This one is so beautiful it lends itself to a public reading if you haven't done that. I love the dreamy, wistful feeling, and the diction is wonderfully expressive. Well done and a privilege to read.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

No doubt that you're the moon's fairest daughter because you've seen nature through your heart. A great pleasure to read it. 👌👏👏

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daydreamer

3 Months Ago

Amazing review, i must say! 💙
just wonderful, I love the set up of this write, the descriptiveness of it as well. Awesome writing

Posted 4 Months Ago


That was a pleasure to read. This was very skillfully crafted and is nothing short of a work of art! I have a few favorite lines and I won't pollute the comments with them but I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. "All the while, the wind dances amongst the dandelions like a belladonna, enthralled..." Ok, I had to take one line out of it ha. Beautiful work!

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

" ~Twin fortune gazers~
We looked up
at the teacup of stars,
and saw shapes forming........ "

This is word-slaying at its finest. Well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Moon's fairest daughter

4 Months Ago

I get the image of Trelawny looking into harry potter's tea cup and predicting his death when I read.. read more
Dandelions growing on headlands, showing their unloved hearts to everyone

Recalling Spraying the Potatoes - Kavanagh

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Moon's fairest daughter

4 Months Ago

Wow those lines sound breathtaking...thank you so much for them! :)

First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

484 Views
24 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on June 16, 2017
Last Updated on June 20, 2017
Tags: romance, past, dandelions, flowers, love

Author

Moon's fairest daughter
Moon's fairest daughter

About
If you're a dreamer, come in If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer, If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire For we have some flax-golden tales to spin .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Love Smoke Love Smoke

A Poem by Paul Bell