Short Poem: Hollow Feet Walking..

Short Poem: Hollow Feet Walking..

A Poem by naznaz
"

Does fate determine our deeds, or deeds our fate?

"

Hollow Feet Walking...


We walk through doors,

that disappear,

in rooms of windows

crystal clear

They show us paths

carved by fickle fate

twisting, contorting

never straight.

 

So we lose ourselves

in alleyways,

mazes of glass

thronged with strays

who smite the walls,

impregnable

as their paths collide

and implode. 

© 2013 naznaz


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A splendid one. Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I was definitely seeing a winding staircase in this. Filled with fragrant flowers curving their bonnets and bouquets upward to a sunlit sky above.

Slight spelling error: "that disapear[disappear]"

Other than that, nicely written !


Posted 10 Years Ago


naznaz

10 Years Ago

Ah, thanks, I had not noticed that! :)
dw817

10 Years Ago

If you are using Mozilla Firefox, it has a built-in spellchecker. It will save lots of time later. I.. read more
It's a real window of life. Good job;)

Posted 10 Years Ago


naznaz

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
You descriptively captured the experience of the maze of life. Nicely done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


naznaz

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
Digging the maze reference. The first couple of lines are my favorite. It really shows that while we can see out the window, it's not so easy to get to the other side.

Posted 10 Years Ago


naznaz

10 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Added on July 16, 2013
Last Updated on July 18, 2013
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naznaz
naznaz

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