Rest In Peace.....?

Rest In Peace.....?

A Story by Zephyr
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The Funeral.....

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The air was cold and I wrapped my arms around myself to keep warm.

I was dressed in black but that didn’t help much. I was practically shivering…

 

I looked around. The cemetery looked damp. Everybody was mourning. That’s what people do when people die…..

 

I stood away from everybody else. I didn’t have the courage to look at the crying faces or the lifeless body….

 

I looked down at my hands. They were pale. My whole body was. Maybe all the crying had its effect.

 

“Clara…..”

I heard my name being called out softly…………

 

I looked in the direction of the voice. It was my mom.

 

Then I heard violent & emotional screams as the body was lowered into the grave……..


“Clara…. dear…. Why did you leave us?

Why…… oh God…..don’t be so cruel…

Give her back…….please……”

 

Yes, you heard her right. It’s my Funeral………..


                                           

© 2017 Zephyr


Author's Note

Zephyr
I know its weird....
Its my second attempt at Horror....
Please say how you feel about this......:)

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Wow this is really good with a great ending!

Well wrote!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Joey...
Glad to read your review...:)
Joey Nizz

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :)
Weirdly amazing... Is what it is... Being dressed in black does not ever seem to help much in the cold... BUT IT SHOULD...! Haha, Depressingly, (in a good way), penned...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Its a pleasure reading your reviews...
Glad you liked and happy to read the review😄
Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Haha, happy as well...!
Hi Naat, I didn't think it was horror, but it was an amazing write, it had a profound transcending feeling of questioning that ever ending mystery of death.... I loved the RIP part!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Hebe...
Glad you enjoyed, dear...:)
the twist really worked... good to read this shorter piece from your side... in fact a good attempt.. keep it up

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Abhishek...
Glad to hear the encouraging review...:)
Well thought out and masterfully constructed but I would call it more metaphysical than horror but I enjoyed it. Thanks for the read request :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much...
And yes, it isn't actually the scary type...:)
I actually didn't .. read more
Well, it's not really "horror" it's just sad in it's own way but I really like it, Naat.
Keep writing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Rassoul!
I agree it isn't really the horror type...:)
Glad you enjo.. read more
sounded like your on a great run with horror stories,just bring on part two now

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, wordman...
Glad you enjoyed and will definitely think about part two:)
How can a dead body wrap its arms around itself? That's one part which I felt was out of place. Another one being the long ellipsis you put in places.
But otherwise I liked the plot twist. Nice attempt at horror.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Dr. YumnaKay

6 Years Ago

Oh and you're welcome, Naat :)
Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Glad to know:)
Rassoul

6 Years Ago

Well, you didn't know it was a dead body at first, even herself didn't know.
Woah! Great job on this poem and I loved the twist! Keep it up :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much....
Am happy you liked...:)
Reading the first part of the story, I felt that a funeral was about someone else, but got a bit shock to know that it was yours. ....wonderfully written.
I love to read very short stories.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zephyr

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Priyanshi...
Glad to know the twist worked....:)
Priyanshi

6 Years Ago

You're welcome,dear friend.

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Added on May 20, 2017
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Tags: Funeral, Death, Sorrow, Horror

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