Lives Entwined...

Lives Entwined...

A Story by Neetha
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Love to death.

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“Are you ready?” He asked. His tone was quivery and his eyes were red.


“With you, I always am.” I was confident.


“Then……. Let’s finish it. Together” He suggested, his eyes trying his best to avoid contact with mine.


“Wait…. Wait for a few more seconds.” I paced towards him.


Standing close to him, I felt that my decision was unquestionable.


I was right.


We were right.


He leaned closer and our lips made way for our last kiss.


We had no other choice.


Our hands caught hold of the cups of wine.


The cups of poison.


The cups of Death.


Hands entwined, we took one quick gulp.


Everything went black as we breathed our last in this loveless world.


© 2017 Neetha



Author's Note

Neetha
World is becoming Loveless.
No freedom to live as we desire.
Monopoly of Majority dominates The World.

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A sad ending to the poem. When two decide death over life. Must endured a disappointed life. Thank you Neetha for sharing the excellent words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


Neetha

2 Months Ago

I am happy to hear from you Coyote:)
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

Was my pleasure my friend.
I thought it was another love story... but then, wait, what? double suicide?!

I love poems or stories that are short but never fail to surprise me at the end. Good work!

Posted 10 Months Ago


A good little story, Neetha. I think it would benefit from a bit more brevity. Lose some of the connectives.
i.e.
"Are you ready?” He asked. His tone quivery, his eyes red."
Third line - “Then……. Let’s finish it. Together” He suggested, his eyes trying their best to avoid contact with mine.
They are small things that do not affect the story itself. Good one.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Neetha

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much Ted:)
Glad to read your review:)
Well dear the way you mince such amazing stories I end up searching for more lines to put up my reviews. Here I go- loveless world because people think they have so many number of options. True value of a person with regards to relationship is when both the partners are committed to each other- no cheating, no lying & no extramarital affairs.

Posted 1 Year Ago


this is so sad. it's like a mini romeo and juliet, it's proving how hurtful this world is

Posted 1 Year Ago


Beautiful just beautiful....

Posted 1 Year Ago


Powerfully penned! Well done!
Tabby

Posted 1 Year Ago


Actually your author note is true to world we live in...
Your write depict it exactly with characters......I loved it...:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Zoe
That was sad...the world has become so cruel...short but a powerful write...well written!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Neetha

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Zoe!:)
Zoe

1 Year Ago

No problem
This was a 'WOW" very potent write!
the confidence of the decision, jumps off the page!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Neetha

1 Year Ago

I am glad to read your words Hebe:)

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Neetha
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Kerala, India



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