Lives Entwined...

Lives Entwined...

A Story by Neetha

Love to death.


“Are you ready?” He asked. His tone was quivery and his eyes were red.

“With you, I always am.” I was confident.

“Then……. Let’s finish it. Together” He suggested, his eyes trying his best to avoid contact with mine.

“Wait…. Wait for a few more seconds.” I paced towards him.

Standing close to him, I felt that my decision was unquestionable.

I was right.

We were right.

He leaned closer and our lips made way for our last kiss.

We had no other choice.

Our hands caught hold of the cups of wine.

The cups of poison.

The cups of Death.

Hands entwined, we took one quick gulp.

Everything went black as we breathed our last in this loveless world.

© 2017 Neetha

Author's Note

World is becoming Loveless.
No freedom to live as we desire.
Monopoly of Majority dominates The World.

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I thought it was another love story... but then, wait, what? double suicide?!

I love poems or stories that are short but never fail to surprise me at the end. Good work!

Posted 6 Months Ago

A good little story, Neetha. I think it would benefit from a bit more brevity. Lose some of the connectives.
"Are you ready?” He asked. His tone quivery, his eyes red."
Third line - “Then……. Let’s finish it. Together” He suggested, his eyes trying their best to avoid contact with mine.
They are small things that do not affect the story itself. Good one.

Posted 7 Months Ago


7 Months Ago

Thank you so much Ted:)
Glad to read your review:)
Well dear the way you mince such amazing stories I end up searching for more lines to put up my reviews. Here I go- loveless world because people think they have so many number of options. True value of a person with regards to relationship is when both the partners are committed to each other- no cheating, no lying & no extramarital affairs.

Posted 8 Months Ago

this is so sad. it's like a mini romeo and juliet, it's proving how hurtful this world is

Posted 9 Months Ago

Beautiful just beautiful....

Posted 9 Months Ago

Powerfully penned! Well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago

Actually your author note is true to world we live in...
Your write depict it exactly with characters......I loved it...:)

Posted 9 Months Ago

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That was sad...the world has become so cruel...short but a powerful write...well written!

Posted 9 Months Ago


9 Months Ago

Thank you so much Zoe!:)

9 Months Ago

No problem
This was a 'WOW" very potent write!
the confidence of the decision, jumps off the page!

Posted 9 Months Ago


9 Months Ago

I am glad to read your words Hebe:)
Ooo good job. I like this a lot.

Posted 9 Months Ago


9 Months Ago

Thank you Ethan:)

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22 Reviews
Added on June 13, 2017
Last Updated on June 13, 2017
Tags: Love, World, Loveless



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