Acid kills...

Acid kills...

A Story by Neetha
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Stop Acid Attacks!

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The acid he threw on my face had distorted half of it.


I looked grotesque.


I smelled grotesque.


I am grotesque.


All because of him.


“Why did you kill me?”


I snarled at him.


He just stood there frozen.


Unable to speak.


Unable to move.


All because he killed me.


And now I stand in front of him.


Dead- Alive.


“WHY?”


I screamed.


“Because….you….rejected…my…my….Love.”


He stammered out.


His eyes almost bulged out of pure fear.


“Oh! I see... I rejected you right?”


I understood his point of justification.


Of burning my face alive.


“Now I am ready, you know, to love you.”


I suggested with an evil laugh.


After all that’s what he wanted in the first place.


“Nooo! Please! Spare me!”


He pleaded.


My exact words when he spurted the acid all over my face.


He ignored them then.


Bloody Blind Love...



                                                 

 


© 2017 Neetha



Author's Note

Neetha
An individual has her/his own choices and desires.
We can't force anybody to love us.
And if sb rejects our love, what we should do is respect their choice.
What we shouldn't do is go out with a bottle of acid and distort them forever.
Stop acid attacks!
Its a shame.
A shame on humanity.

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Okay so nice idea. However, are you familiar with passive voice? Because it pops up a lot here. Passive voice, loosely, is when you don't directly name or identify the object being spoken about in clear and definite terms.
1. So for instance, the opening line of your story:

"The acid he threw on my face had distorted half of it."

--"had distorted half of it" is passive voice. Reword it to say, "He threw the acid, distorting half of my face."

2. "All because of him. Unable to speak. Unable to move. All because he killed me. Of burning my face alive. Bloody Blind Love..."

--These are all, more or less, incomplete sentences. I understand the effect you were going for, but seeing as you leave space between all the lines, inserting commas instead of periods shouldn't affect much.

All in all, nice job, just a few things stand in your way. :)



Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Anjali

5 Months Ago

Well no denying that.
Neetha

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much Ethan!
I never thought about it like that!
And I would have never un.. read more
Neetha

5 Months Ago

I agree with you dear Anjali:)



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Very true, and yet so sad that it even exists now a days as well. Good job

Posted 5 Months Ago


Neetha

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much Maria:)
The absolute violent nature of these type of attacks is numbing and leaves me speechless. I can't imagine. I don't want to. But it's a reality that we cant escape from. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Neetha

5 Months Ago

Always a pleasure duff:)
duff

5 Months Ago

Likewise my friend:)
I live in the US and didn't know this was a thing. Absolutely heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing and bringing awareness for such disturbing and disgusting acts. I find it ridiculous that humans would destroy someone's life over rejected marriage proposals, domestic disputes and sexual advances. How hateful. How petty. Your work has brought out much emotion, I think that was the intention. Very nice writing by the way.

“Now I am ready, you know, to love you.” - I love this as it perfectly illustrates the offender's ignorance.


Posted 5 Months Ago


Neetha

5 Months Ago

Sorry for the late reply Kaliope:(
Connection error.
Kaliope

5 Months Ago

I can't believe it's so common. It's essentially attempted murder.
Neetha

5 Months Ago

Yes. it is.
But reality is real!
thats been always a sad part to know that we still live in a society where few unsocial elements don't have the right to be called as humans... my heart really fluctuates whenever i hear any of these cases... nicely penned... really appreciate

Posted 5 Months Ago


I appreciate your will to write about acid attacks that is often so common in India- and reason you cite here is true to the core. A mere rejection of a proposal by a boy/man could result into being an acid attack victim (survivor I would say). To add to all the woes of physical pain the society does nothing more than contributing to mental harass of the already suffering fellow human being.

Posted 5 Months Ago


The poem is real life and I don't understand. You are right. A shame on society. Powerful and needed written words. A powerful poem needed to be read by more people.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


Such a strong message, it is very touching and sad but made me smile in the end because it was such an amazing piece that I have read!

Thank you for sharing Neetha! ^^

Posted 5 Months Ago


wonderful and a touching message..you r true..it's a shame...it's a disgrace!
keep writing .

Posted 5 Months Ago


Its beautiful to see someone write for a stronger reason than just to write. This opened my eyes and kept my interest. Very good story telling technique.

Posted 5 Months Ago



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