Goodbye...

Love betrayed her

Leaving her to lurch

In a lonely world.

 

Alas she met him

Who promised her

To end her solitude forever.

Author's Note

Here 'him' refers to death.
A poem for many lost loved ones...

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

You exactly penned down my emotions. I want to add few more lines to make it exactly my situation.
Alas she met him
Who promised her
To end her solitude forever
Situation was such
She got no choice than to sacrifice their love
She was left alone again
I am glad I came across this :)

[Zephyr]

I hope you will meet the person you deserve truly and who deserves you. I try to let go of the past as best as I can.
Be happy dear:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Trying but it's difficult...

[Zephyr]

I know.....

[Olabisi Rotimi Abel]

This time I hope it ends well

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad I came across your words . I have met the one who deserves me and got engaged :)
After reading this I am really happy. Your words got true.

[Zephyr]

I am happy for you Najam:)

[Najam Us Saher]

😊😊😊😊😊

[Olabisi Rotimi Abel]

This time, I hope it ends well...

[Jasmijn]

This poem really has me shaking. It's very powerful. Keep up the writing!

[Ted Kniffen]

Death is but the next step in the journey we all must take. Well done Neetha.

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad poem shared. Death is never a goo date. You said a complete poem in so few words. Hard to do. Thank you Neetha for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Hebe]

Hi Neetha, very touching words and thoughts. We invest so much of ourselves in relationships.... maybe thats not so good, on the other hand what would life be without passion and risk! Lovely verse

[Anjali]

Wow simply outstanding. I liked this poem, by my perception I thought she met someone (man) but alas after reading your note that ended pretty sad. Anyways great work 👏👏👏

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Anjali:)

[Anjali]

Most welcome 🙏😊

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Love and life both can be difficult beyond imagination. Life goes through a series of ups and downs, challenges and rewards. On the other hand, love goes through different episodes too. Romance, togetherness, distance, separation, faithfulness, betrayal, heartbreak, and what not! It is, in itself, a challenge as well as a reward. But, I have always felt that a life without love is not life at all. Losing love is an end on its own. Specially for a soul that has tasted love even for once, for that existence carrying the loss of lost love is overburdening.

Nice words, good read. :)

[Zephyr]

Thank you so much Fahmida:)

[Alex Ware]

The world is all too lonely..

[Zephyr]

Thanks for the review Alex:)

[Priyanshi]

After a long time, i got to read another writing of you.Loved the use of words, Neetha and a touching piece even.
keep on writing.

[Zephyr]

I am glad to read from you Priyanshi:)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Zoya]

A nice meaning behind it. Maybe you should change the word 'solitude' to 'loneliness' in the last line. Solitude has more or less a positive connotation I guess. Loneliness sounds more apt. Up to you though.
Like the personification of death here. Nicely done!

[Zephyr]

Thanks Zoe:)
And thanks for the suggestion:)

[Zoya]

No problem