Losing

Losing

A Story by Ghania
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Just thinking

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Fear of losing.
Losing oneself.

One's faith,
inner contentment
and love. 

Losing oneself - 
is ~ horrible ...


© 2017 Ghania



Author's Note

Ghania
I wish I may never lose the aforementioned.

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I agree with your message & you have written this with much feeling. I like the details you include, like losing faith & contentment. But this does not sound like someone who has actually lived thru this experience. It sounds like someone who never wants to know what this feels like. In other words, your message could be expanded to show more about how this happens or how this feels. But as a simple statement, your message is true & easily understood (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

4 Months Ago

Oh yes! Very rightly pointed out. I have never really gone through that. It was just, what came to .. read more



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I agree with your message & you have written this with much feeling. I like the details you include, like losing faith & contentment. But this does not sound like someone who has actually lived thru this experience. It sounds like someone who never wants to know what this feels like. In other words, your message could be expanded to show more about how this happens or how this feels. But as a simple statement, your message is true & easily understood (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

4 Months Ago

Oh yes! Very rightly pointed out. I have never really gone through that. It was just, what came to .. read more
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Zoe
You really can lose yourself while loving others. People usually tend to forget their value when in love; getting affection in return is enough for them.
This was wonderfully written. Very well summarised in such few words.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your thought here. I really appreciate it. =)
Zoe

5 Months Ago

You're welcome
Simply stating some powerful emotions. Good work. :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

6 Months Ago

Thank U very much.
aine

6 Months Ago

You're welcome
In as much as I really liked what you wrote here and quite agree to the message, I'd say writing it like this would be more impactful, especially the last line which should be separated to give a more finer/stronger impact. Just my thoughts on this. You write well.

Fear of losing.
Losing oneself.

One's faith,
inner contentment
and love.

Losing oneself -
is ~ horrible ...

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Yumna. I appreciate your constructive comment. And I really liked the way you sug.. read more
Dr YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you too for taking it as constructive :) always a pleasure reading good works 😊 you're welc.. read more
Ghania

7 Months Ago

Very Welcome again. :P
I wish you could place 'losing oneself' at the second last line, just before 'is horrible'. This would make the overall impact of the poem; saying that you are losing yourself completely after losing faith and contentment. Just a thought

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

7 Months Ago

Thanks a lot, Ashwin. I will surely consider it.
I liked your constructive thought. :)))
Fear is perhaps our greatest foe. It to shall pass

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Yes, its horrible. And scary too. Yet one finds such joy in finding oneself again. I loved this brief yet such insightful write.


Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
You've penned a little poem like a prayer with a lot going for it here Nerdy.


Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

8 Months Ago

Thanks a lot, Tony. :)
So poignant and so powerful. What have we left to face this world if not our identity, our faith, our peace, and love itself that binds all else together. May you only find yourself fulfilled more each day, dear poet.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

8 Months Ago

Thanks a lot , Craig. :)
this was really simple and yet so beautifully written.
i feel its more of a poem than a story but i love the wisdom you set here. you beautifully introduced what it means to lose something
that something being yourself and all the other factors that make you a person. Real loss in life comes from a persons self loss.
wonderful work!!! always happy to read your work

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghania

8 Months Ago

Thanks a lot. Pia. I am glad U liked it. ((Hugs))

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