Ely-07.13.2189_SavedChat

Ely-07.13.2189_SavedChat

A Story by Nerio
"

who said that modern chats cannot be passionate?

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@Ely-07.13.89 12:02
this is Paradise, Alex
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:05
send me a pic, c'mon
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:07
sent. do you see the field full of grain? It looks just like that one, in that film we saw once. Do you remember?
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:07
awesome. I'm so happy for you. It must be great beeing there...
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:08
no
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:10
"no" what?
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:11
no, it isn't. And you should not be happy for me. Ever. There is nothing to cheer about, Alex
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:11
Ely, if you're going on like this, I'll stop chatting. seriously, you promised me no drama. no guilt. otherwise (you agreed on that) no communication. Period.
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:12
I miss you, honey
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:14
NO, F**K. NO ELY. NO. NO. Did you forget what we said? Not to use THAT word. Ever. Don't say 'I miss you' anymore or I swear, I'll delete your chat code and close the channel. I'm not joking, Ely!
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:15
I'm sorry Alex. I should be thankful, I know. I should simply enjoy Paradise and instead I'm complaining with you, stuck on a polluted and spoiled planet. I'm so sorry. Please, forgive me. I'm a bad person. I swear I won't say THAT word any more, but please don't close the chat. Please, Alex
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:15
Let's just forget about it, ok? Changing topic, do you still have the list? That one, "Things to do when we will be in the biospher"?
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:19
oh yes. Here it is. 1: see a REAL grain field. Done
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:20
that's it, Ely. Go on with the list. What's next?
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:21
2: breath real fresh air: done. 3: run with bare feet on the grass. 4: have real food without using that awful purificator
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:21
it sounds perfect: you've got plenty of things to do up there, in biosphere 'Paradise' . we promised to complete the list and now it's all up to you. One after another, I want you to complete those tasks
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:25
not all of theme, Alex. 8: kissing without respirator. 10: hugging without anti-radiation vest. 11: make love, completly naked, on the grass. 14
 

@Alex-07.13.89 12:28
ok, fine. not all of them
 

@Ely-07.13.89 12:45
no. I cannot do this alone, Alex. I'm sorry but I cannot


@Alex-07.13.89 12:46
you must, Ely. Just forget about me. It will be easier. Or else you'll get mad. And me either, I'll go insane. Because, you know, we won't ever meet again. chatting on the terminals will be the best we may get. And that's all, for the rest of our lifes.


@Ely-07.13.89 12:55
no. I cannot. I don't want. Oh Lord, why did I ever jump on that f*****g shuttle? I could have staied on Earth with you. But no! My name was on that other list, the list of the lucky ones and so I left. What a ugly selfish b*****d I am.


@Alex-07.13.89 13:06
stop it, Ely. you know I wouldn't ever allowed you to stay

 
@Ely-07.13.89 13:07
I cannot be happy, Alex. I don't want, without you


@Alex-07.13.89 13:08
but you will, dear. for both of us. Or else I'll jump in the incinerator, sooner or later, and you won't be able to stop me


@Ely-07.13.89 13:09
fine. I'll be happy, Alex


@Alex-07.13.89 13:11
good. and I'll be right there with my messages, Ely. you'll see. Now send me another pic. C'mon! let me see what is like the colour of your sky


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She: regrets her impulsive decision and longs for what she had, unable to enjoy what she gained.

He: must detach himself emotionally in order to let her go, while still hanging on to the thinnest glimmers of happiness through the lens, captured in pictures that her eyes refuse to see.

Together and yet apart: joined by technology and fractured heart.

It's ever amazing how humans adapt instinctually and the greater part of that shift is through psychological adaptation.

I like the flow of the conversation and how an hour and nine minutes summed up Alex and Ely so that they are completely relatable.

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Nerio

1 Week Ago

Thanks again Linda. I'm very happy you enjoyed this piece. Long distance relation was once a nightma.. read more



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its actually interesting to read the conversation!! is it just imaginary?

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Nerio

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Dear itsmenabs,
thanks for your time and most of all for your feedback. the truth behind the .. read more
She: regrets her impulsive decision and longs for what she had, unable to enjoy what she gained.

He: must detach himself emotionally in order to let her go, while still hanging on to the thinnest glimmers of happiness through the lens, captured in pictures that her eyes refuse to see.

Together and yet apart: joined by technology and fractured heart.

It's ever amazing how humans adapt instinctually and the greater part of that shift is through psychological adaptation.

I like the flow of the conversation and how an hour and nine minutes summed up Alex and Ely so that they are completely relatable.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nerio

1 Week Ago

Thanks again Linda. I'm very happy you enjoyed this piece. Long distance relation was once a nightma.. read more

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