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things we did

A Poem by Nerio
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I may sound quite as the 'bad-guy' in this poem, I know. But our existence is also made of things we may find unpolite and not-pilitically correct. So I accept and remember them here, as a part of me

"
the things we did
when things were young
and we used
to hit
the road and the night
like dogs
barking at the sky,
have changed.
somehow, somewhere.
things we used,
things we caught,
things we lost halfway,
not real, not even dead.
loves, diseases, trains, words.
drop after drop,
picture after picture,
we've crossed the voids
between earth and dreams,
just to land
on a couch.
now
black static in the eyes,
hardned wings and weakened bodies,
we found the dark
at the end of the tunnel.
dogs no longer barking:
wagging tails and classy leashes.
but those things
are still there,
just beneath the ashes.
things we wasted,
things we loved and killed.
and made us
somewhat
stupid, horrible but
unique.
things that now
howl along
theese verses.

© 2018 Nerio



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People always say that they wish they could go back in the past knowing the things that they know now. This to me shows the evolution and the wisdom that comes with age. We wish that we could go back and right the wrongs, but it is the wrongs which gives us the wisdom. When we know better, we do better. Unfortunately, life is not a poem; and we cannot rewrite it. The only thing that we can do is move forward, cognizant of the moment, and try to make choices that we will not look back upon with regret. Writing poems about those past mistakes gives us healing and perhaps guidance for others so that they will not make the same mistakes.

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Nerio

8 Months Ago

"Unfortunately, life is not a poem; and we cannot rewrite it"
wow, even your review are aston.. read more



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I read this verse as the downward spill, after all the fast and daring things our youth once offered us. It was a great tribute to the lives we once lived!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

thank you so much for your feedback. I'd be curious to know how you intend your past, if a collectio.. read more

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4/1/18
11:37 AM U.S. CST
"My Review of things we did by Nerio, a fellow Writer's Cafe Author"
by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org)

So, Nerio

You seem to be bordering on a "When I was your age" kind of thing. Yeah, I'm 47, so I'll get there some day, but in the meantime, I mentioned The Lazy Mentalist type a few reviews back, and this is a theme of your work, in my opinion.

I also mentioned latency a few reviews back, as well. Yeah, it's good to see you think about things, as it show's you have an at least kind of active mind. It's neat that you re-hash, if you will, stale and forgotten parts of you. I don't as I'm in the middle of a few things. A sit on the porch kind of thing?

You write for yourself, and that's awesome! You don't seem to be a Retail Sausage Head. Great! Neither am I.

I wish I could zone out like you, on a couch. Maybe soon...

PB Jacobs


Posted 4 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

Dear PB Jacobs, thank you very much for your time and consideration. I'm back on this forum after a .. read more
Wow sir..m just fan of Ur imagery.."howls along these verses"...nice write

Posted 4 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

thanks for you kind feedback Govind. I just hope it makes sense XD
Sometime I got lost in my .. read more
Govind singh

2 Weeks Ago

Yeah...and it's great for poets..btw your an amazing poet and an honest reviewer:)
Well with age comes wisdom they say, but sometimes in our adult ages...off and on we still try to do some things we regret that are dumb. Like this write, shows character.

Posted 6 Months Ago


It is hard to let go of the past. We get lost in what used to be and bury those memories deep inside. I loved your poem. It expresses the heart of the things not forgotten.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for your appreciation, dear Elisabeth. Yes, indeed the past is sometime a wonderful pain. Tha.. read more
Sent me back to when I was younger. My life was never ever that fun, but it was a lot less stressful. This was well written and entertaining. Thumbs up

Posted 7 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

Well, there is a way to say here that goes like this: "the time flee from us, but the signs stays fo.. read more
This is brilliant! I love it! It describes life so perfectly, but not in a straightforward way. I love the way your message is a roundabout statement using many vivid & unusual metaphors, gradually building up to an ending crescendo that's like a confessional that could apply to any of us. I am old now, so regret is a constant struggle . . . so many regrets for the things I did badly . . . & we all do lots of things badly. This is such a universal message told in a very original way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

thanks for your kind words and precious feedback. the idea of not-straightforward stream of consciou.. read more
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Old is something I earned & I'll flaunt it if I want to!
Its remarkable how you go into depth through the personal experiences of human beings. I like your poem because the honesty is to the max here. I also believe that people can handle the distasteful aspects of the world, if we change our perception and actions. I guess I'm somewhat of an optimist and an idealist in this regard. Still, we can't forget the practicalities of life, but we can pull through them. Great work

Posted 8 Months Ago


Nerio

2 Weeks Ago

Dear Thepensiveplayer, I believe we belong to the same League: we fight for ideals, but we never los.. read more
I think its healthy to live each period of Your life as it should be and fully, as possible as we can, I don't consider myself had a real teenager days, I think I was more mature and different from those whom were my age, if Your teenager days were wild, You will have something to remember You whole life, what matters if You've learned from Your experience or not, and reading You here, You surely did.

Posted 8 Months Ago


People always say that they wish they could go back in the past knowing the things that they know now. This to me shows the evolution and the wisdom that comes with age. We wish that we could go back and right the wrongs, but it is the wrongs which gives us the wisdom. When we know better, we do better. Unfortunately, life is not a poem; and we cannot rewrite it. The only thing that we can do is move forward, cognizant of the moment, and try to make choices that we will not look back upon with regret. Writing poems about those past mistakes gives us healing and perhaps guidance for others so that they will not make the same mistakes.

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Nerio

8 Months Ago

"Unfortunately, life is not a poem; and we cannot rewrite it"
wow, even your review are aston.. read more

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