This is all it'll ever be

This is all it'll ever be

A Poem by NeverSurrender
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Something I had to write off my mind

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You're there when I'm down
Make me win my daily fight
Help me through everything
But won't spend the night

I feel more than I should
It's slipping through my fingers
I know it's wrong
But the thought still lingers

I've known it all along
But it's so hard for me to see
That this is what it is
And all it'll ever be

© 2010 NeverSurrender


Author's Note

NeverSurrender
Something I had in my head for a while. Not one of my best, but I just had to get it out.

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this is nice and sweet. You've done well to capture the mood you were feeling when you wrote this. Such longing in a piece is very well portrayed. Nice work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Even if you don't consider this as one of your best, I find beauty in it's rawness. It's a bittersweet story, and it definitely strikes a chord. I liked the second stanza quite a bit, and the imagery and feeling it provokes. Well done :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good. I can feel the bittersweet feeling of knowing that it won't be more than it is even though you want it to. Nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ok. Pretty good. I like the rhyme scheme and pattern you tried to keep throughout. The first stanza was a bit wordy; just keep it simple. The last stanza flowed best. The rhythym was good and did not interrupt the meaning. I understand that you just wanted to share something. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
Gionelly*KiSS

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is so beautiful and filled with emotions
only 12 lines but you've explained everything that you wanted
It needs talent
But the thought still lingers
I think this line is very essential for this poem. When you know that the desire of wanting more than a friendship is wrong but this stubborn heart doesn't allow it to leave easily and it creates a hurricane inside
very well expressed
~Aaradhya

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful! I wish I had your talent =)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very compelling, especially when it may relate to people you know and their situations.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this really shows true colors behind the words. You may not think it's your best but it is powerful and so true. I really liked it. Its short and simple and right to the point. Expressing every detail in just a few key words. Thanks for posting.

Posted 13 Years Ago


amazing poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


very pretty...remember the love that is formed from friendship were there is respect for one another...then when it flourishes oh how u will cherish it

Posted 13 Years Ago



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