Fire Crest

Fire Crest

 

Dance naked for me Fire-crest

Decapitate the rose

Then tell me of your love for sailors

And remember

This last half gram of opium

Can only be

A token of my love for you

 

Reviews

[Circe]

there is a dark beauty in this piece, firecrest a firecracker.. in title and essence.. and even in self-destruction it seems we still see the beauty in this world, decapitate the rose, a striking line.. reminds me of a natural savagery.. love the passion that's conveyed and the descriptions being so visceral in a few words, just mesmerising to the reader.

[Neville]

Thank you so much for your take on this piece Circe, your comments are always appreciated. all Good Things, your friend, Neville

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous. It reminds me of Tom Waits. Beautiful work.

[Neville]

Thanks for checking in Tom .. muchly appreciated .. Neville

[Ana Papaya]

I had to Google fire Crest and now it makes more sense. Nice one
:)

[Neville]

woz she there.. tis a very handy tool that.. thank you & truly :)

[Ana Papaya]

She was there. :)

[Neville]

and there waz me thinking she got up early to prep me Sunday veggies :)

[Ana Papaya]

Must have been a different bird?

[Neville]

shhhhh… dont tell the missus :)

[sette]

while reading this poem reminds me of the sailor days and sailor stories.. well written piece my friend

[Neville]

thank you sette, it is meant to be a bit like that, probably, maybe, possibly, I think.... N

[Chris Shaw]

Love, violence and drugs all in the same short poem Neville. I'm not even going to try and go anywhere with this. I'm just gonna say this is one of Neville's special recipes. Cooking up another treat for his readers. The only firecrest that I have known is a bird, a little warbler.

Chris

[Neville]

Hi Chris... another very old one I thought could use a brief airing since it hadn't seen the light of day for such a long time... yes that beautiful little bird that has the distinction of being the joint smallest of our little feathered friends along with the gold crested wren... thank you for touching base... oh how I dislike that phrase... your visit as always is appreciated of course.. hold those drugs... Neville x

[Chris Shaw]

poppy seeds on my bread, is as far as I've gone (lol) and of course opium the perfume I have worn.

[Neville]

good girl..... N

[Onlyme]

Dark, dramatic and scary. Short sweet and straight to the point.

[Neville]

How very kind of you to consider these words of mine, very much appreciated too.... kind regards, Neville

[Onlyme]

No thank you Neville. make me think too.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Firecrest"
Neville Petitt,
The descriptive title is the theme here. Your poem ends with "A token of my love for you" It is a love which is a burning flame and destructive burning. Then your mention: "decapitate the rose" and I felt like the use of this drug, opium's history in time and the mention of sailors: "then tell me of your love of sailors" was quite fitting. This poem made me think.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Neville]

Hey my friend, thank you so very much, I can't say how much a thrill it was to find that you took the time to consider these almost ancient words of mine... I can hardly thank you enough... Have a fantastic day..... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

I am stuck on "decapitate the rose" and your lack of fondness for my similar analogy - nevertheless, I like this one, a lot.

[Neville]

Thanks for the review, your opinion is always appreciated. Please remind me about the analogy. N