Before I Go Blind

Before I Go Blind

A Poem by Neville Pettitt
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Before I Go Blind

 

Seize for me the sun

For I shall yet have the moons

Most fairest daughter


© 2019 Neville Pettitt



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and I see the light, maybe just before i see nothing ever again.
but a good combo to see...quite the senryu here...
should "moons" be "moon's" possessive?
at any rate...and who is giving away those daughters, i might like to seize one of them, also.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

thank you my friend... I will go check....... N



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Such a lovely senryu. The Moon's fairest daughter ,eh? Well might as well shoot for the stars! :). Lydi***

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

4 Days Ago

It makes sense to aim high when vision aint what it used to be... thank you Lydi**.... Neville
Nev,
Sounds Like the Bard himself!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

1 Week Ago

I'm smiling from me pierced ear to the very other one on the opposite corner of my face :)
I get tripped up on senryu vs haiku but it makes no difference really. It's a delightful and clever poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

It's the thank you's that matter...many thank you's Ana..... Neville
Ana Papaya

1 Week Ago

you are welcome :)
Neville Pettitt

1 Week Ago

thank you :)
I see my friend Jacob already wondered about the moon's fairest daughters --- as I read it possessively as well -- I like this little word play.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you ever so Lyn... I feel fitfully indulged this fine sunny mane............ Neville
Neville, I applaud you. Technically correct haiku with true substance, something rarely read. And, the perfect title.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

thank you kindly sir.. I am more than made up with your encouraging comments.... cheers, Neville
Passionate and beautiful declaration, Neville. Your pristine Senryu reaches out and grabs the reader’s attention and heart. We feel the need, the urgency in your dramatic words. Blinded by the light...of love- yes, and absolutely true!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

I am truly honoured by your visit Annette and can't thank you enough for your lovely comments... ble.. read more
and I see the light, maybe just before i see nothing ever again.
but a good combo to see...quite the senryu here...
should "moons" be "moon's" possessive?
at any rate...and who is giving away those daughters, i might like to seize one of them, also.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

thank you my friend... I will go check....... N
Oh how I love this Haiku! So poetic in its declaration. Awesome words N! Nice to see you after such time.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

You are most kind, thank you DIVYA... Neville
DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

You’re most welcome N. I’m so happy to see you 😀
Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

then I am just gonna go thank you again :)
Delectable enjambment there at moons. I can’t resist a good enjambment. I like the way the title prepares us for something desperate but then the poem lulls with the softness of all that power and beauty of nature. A mean haiku here.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

I am truly honoured my friend, and then some....Neville
This is an interesting & thought-provoking little tidbit. What I get most is POWERFUL! It feels like a lion roaring his decree! Love it! I've missed ya! We've both been a little flaky at times (((NUGS))) Fondly Margie

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville Pettitt

2 Weeks Ago

Many thanks Margie, and much appreciated too.. NUG NUG... Neville

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