Misery of My own Making

The makings of me.....

Once again I've done this to myself

and one can't help but wonder why

this pattern of behavior is

un-BREAK-a-ble

 

And no matter how hard I try

Maybe I will never be enough

 

My tears flow

as streams and rivers often do

yet they never reach a final destination

They spill

 

d

o

w

n

onto the floor

and never become absorbed

just finding alternate places to contain themselves

until finally my heart can take no more

and it

 

STOPS

 

I imagine a world

Where there is no us

And what we have become is nothing more

than former lovers

and you stand and ask me

if things will be weird now

since we had

one

thing

go

wrong

 

Thoughts

r   u   n   n   i   n   g

 

r     a     c     i     n     g

 

Never stopping to pause

and give me an opportunity

to digest and accept me for who I am

 

 

 

 

 

But you do.

Reviews

[Kyle A. Smith]

I'm really a bad reviewer..but dang.

I liked your artisic display that you have written along with it...
it adds a lot.

Particullary (sorry..I cannot spell and i don't wanna check it out...) I like the part that starts with I imagine a world where there is no us...

and I think about my own life, and it gives me more thoughts and becomes more relvent to my life.
once again, the artistic display of words really helps a lot.

[Nik'aule]

This is truly amazing. I think that everyone can find something to identify with within this piece...

I imagine a world

Where there is no us

And what we have become is nothing more

than former lovers

...That's the part I best identify with... wonderful work!

[Jay W Valentine]

This is amazing. Things you identify with usually are though. It's bad when one thing goes wrong but it's worse when nothing goes wrong and you're left with these same feelings. Thank you for putting this universal feeling into words.

[brittanyjane]

Oh, for the love of God.

just finding alternate places to contain themselves
until finally my heart can take no more


Very nice, Missus. I thought that was really powerful. I often feel that way myself. And I must say, I was reallly impressed with this. It kinda made me sad =[
I kept wondering how you were going to end it and you ended very well. I love the line about former lovers and the question is it going to be weird between us (not a direct quote or very acurate, sorry)
It made me smile.
like this - =]
it was awesome. I loved it. I thought it was good and wonderful and true and [most important] you.
keep it up.
love ya.
brittanyjayne

[Sexy Jones]

I automatically identified with this piece when I read:
"Once again I've done this to myself
and one can't help but wonder why
this pattern of behavior is

un-BREAK-a-ble

And no matter how hard I try
Maybe I will never be enough"

I think I felt like this every time I got in trouble or every time I did something wrong.
Like I could not live up to these certain expectations.
Like I would never be good enough to be considered...family.

Great piece.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

If you confess to your own mistakes, especially when they are associated with a relationship and you ask for reconciliation, there can be no condemnation.

The poetical structure, word play and delivery of emotional composition displayed in this write, confirms this statement, with the very last line;

'But you do.'

Which I believe translates as - 'forgiveness'!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[H. A. M.]

First, I like the way it's displayed. Kinda random like someone in the situation. The way it's displayed makes it look like the person isn't stable or can't get their grip on things. Almost manic like. So they seem lost. Especially after this situation they went thru. I don't want to analize it to death, I just want to appreciate.
it.
The end kinda wraps it up and makes it seem like the cycle is repeating itself. Now that was a good line.
Fromthe start of

"Once again I've done this to myself
and one can't help but wonder why
this pattern of behavior is
un-BREAK-a-ble"

to the end

"But you do."
I can see that cycle. Kinda erie. I like this. I don't want to because of the situation their in but I do.
kudos.

[Bubo]

Never stoping to pause

and give me an opportunity (stopping)
Patter (pattern?)

Relationships take many twists and turns, and we wonder why when we have something so good, we try maybe to break it, to see how far we can push.............fear I think, of losing, being vulnerable......and we ask ourselves how our partners put up with it.
And your so right, we imagine that loss of love 100 times over......and still repeat the same patterns.
But your love believes in you, and accepts.
This is a beautiful piece, showing that confusion, trying to disgest who you are and why confusion reigns.
I love the layout, and your emotional read.

[Brooklyn Darkchild]

i can't review anything until Lent.
But I'd better leave The Poetry to The Girl...
I'm Not Worthy, Girl.

[Nykkiicia Cion]

interesting