Drawing a Line in the Sands of Time

Another societal metaphor.

Billions of reaching hands in need

grasp the knotted rope of Time

each twisted point an era or age

of human evolution and thinking.

Between each ball tightly weaved

like those silken beliefs of the day

existed divergent threads sowing

past those hemlines of uniformity.

Rebellious fabrics like a patchwork

form changing styles and ideology

to separate men as they are worn

swaddling new beginnings to grow.

On and on goes a braided progress

with stubborn hands clutching firm

to old ideas that have less meaning

in a world of continual development.

Other hands eagerly pull us forward

without contemplation of the design

of that new fabric insisting strength

exists without the weight of reason.

Mankind's pitty-pat game of grasping

serves only to tighten white knuckled

fists as they swing about on the rope

of tangled intentions forming a noose. 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

History repeats itself unfortunately, but you've written it so poignantly Astro...last stanza is killer and you wrap up it up in a nice little bow, or rope as you would have it....well done!

[Astro]

Thanks Frieda, glad you liked it!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"Mankind's pitty-pat game of grasping

serves only to tighten white knuckled

fists as they swing about on the rope

of tangled intentions forming a noose. "~ You have weaved an intriguing rope... this was tied beautifully together... Profound end, to a brilliant write!

[Astro]

Thank you Robbie you are very kind. I'm 'Knot' just saying that. ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Cute! (he he)

I truly enjoyed reading this piece. x:)

[Astro]

Well thank you again.

[Dr. Wood ?]

bleak AND beautiful..................................

[Astro]

Well thank you Doc. It is a bit of both I'd have to admit.

[Jack...]

And yet they still can't see the ill fitting garments they weave. Very cool my friend.

[Astro]

Thanks Jack, it's like women who choose to keep wearing shoes that hurt their feet.

[koty bell]

Realivent deep and profound great stiff here sir

[Astro]

Thanks man, glad you enjoyed it!

[koty bell]

I enjoyed it very much sir keep up the good s**t man

[Astro]

I'll do my best, thanks again.

[koty bell]

No problemo

[shallimarRose]

This is so realivent and so good that I could not decide what to highlight.. I wanted to re-post every line to you..I love the ending.. "serves only to tighten white knuckled
fists as they swing about on the rope
of tangled intentions forming a noose. "

so many excellent couplets..and lines.. shallimarRose

"silken beliefs" of the day
existed divergent threads sowing
past those hemlines of uniformity."
braided progress
"with stubborn hands clutching firm
to old ideas that have less meaning
in a world of continual development."

[Astro]

Well thank you very much ShallimarRose, I too believe in its inherent relevance and it is my attempt at artistically showing a truth that is problematic should we continue repeating our ways like stitches in a death shroud of our own making. I'm glad you can appreciate it, thank you for the kind review.