Today

Today

A Poem by Nicole
"

Happy days. :D

"

Today I found a puppy,

a puppy left a stray.

Today I smoked a cigarette,

three cigarettes a day.

Today I looked at the sun,

the glowing light in the sky.

 

Today I thought about my life.

And how I could change it.

Today I looked at the sky,

and jumped "Hurray!"

Everyday is a new day.

Time to change, time to grow, time to assay.

© 2009 Nicole


Author's Note

Nicole
The last verse to me needs improving... any ideas?

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Thanks for making me smile! =] I liked the light and carefree nature of this poem, and thought that it progressed really well. Reading this poem made me realise that in life, it's not the big moments of happiness that matter so much, but the little things, like finding a puppy, or having the sun shine for you, that can be strung together, to experience true happiness.
A nice write,
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


this may sound weird, but this really made me want to go outside and lie down in the grass and stuff XD i like the repetitive use of "today", it helps the poem progress :D

Posted 14 Years Ago




Very good piece, the last line is totally what sold me on the poem, but the whole thing is solid and a very good piece of work.

-Richard.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was a very good poem you've written here.


Posted 14 Years Ago


Revolution's heart is today, for the last line? o_o

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the images within this piece. I also like the way this piece reads like a beautiful narrative. The last verse in particular is a nice clincher, in that it ties everything together so beautifully.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I don't think the last verse needs to change at all. I think that is where the poem is summed up. I like it the way it is, it's uplifting and gives a nice message. I especially love the last line:
"Time to change, time to grow, time to live."
It's really nice to read something uplifting at times opposed to dark and depressing. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.


Posted 14 Years Ago


you can use "assay" at the end of the last line which means to experiance, to try or you can use "play" and give it a little sugar? something which rhymes with "day". It makes it much better ^_^

but if you ask me, its already very good. I needed some positivity, thanks for the remedy!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Nicole
Nicole

Ft. Lauderdale, FL



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My full name is Nicolette Garmini Elise Ramsingh. I'm a proud person, sure some of the things I do may be bad. Maybe even stupid but, hey. Its my life. :) I love my friends to death. And I'm just .. more..

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