White Words

I write on the walls

As I wander these empty halls

White words

Tinted with isolation

White words 

Written as I walk

Words I can't say when I talk

So I write them on the walls

As I wander these empty halls

I walk on the ceiling 

Trying to lose my feeling

Useless footsteps

Taken in vain

Useless footsteps

Intended to outrun this pain

As I walk on the ceiling 

Trying to lose my feeling

I lie on the floor

Staring at the door

Thin shades of light

Let in from its opening

Thin shades of light

Let in from its one square window

As I lie on the floor

Staring at the door

Still trying to find all the words

I can't say when I talk

So I write them on the walls

As I wander these empty halls

Reviews

[DONNA WEBBER]

Hi I am new to this site and I don't fully understand the rating or how to do it but I do know the the words that you have written tell quite a story and I love how you brought me there it was hard to see the sadness but you also brought me to the light

[Nicole Laszlo]

Well thank you, I'm glad I could share with you. And I appreciate the review!

[Lovecraft]

Sounds like a person with no one to talk to or confide in, a creeping loneliness that slowly sets in. Another interpretation I have is that the writer is a Ghost/Spirit eternally wandering a small vicinity, unable to leave or speak.

Perhaps it is a statement about escaping within our own minds and being afraid to say what we really mean. Maybe the "White Words" on the wall are invisible to everyone except ourselves...

I sense bitter loneliness as one of the core themes in this poem as well as being unable to escape something or someone, though I may be a bit off track so correct me if I am mistaken.

It's a beautifully crafted, melancholic poem. The isolation is palpable and conveyed very well. I love it.

Very well done, Nicole! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

writing on the walls of our minds...and transferring that white paper into books of memories...of those words that can only be expressed by the pen.
i really like the theme and rhythm of this one...

j.

[Nicole Laszlo]

I'm glad to hear it. I like the interpretation. Memories are a funny thing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. Life is loud sometimes and sometimes life is empty walls and seeking proper words to understand place and life. I like the visions create by this poem. I have used the sea and the lakes to gather my way and my thoughts. Thank you Nicole for sharing your amazing poetry. I love your work. You make the reader ponder and think. The goal of the writer.
Coyote

[Nicole Laszlo]

It was pretty sad.. Thank you for the review and for the seemingly always encouraging words. I'm glad the goal is being met ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to release sadness and thoughts to paper. Allowed us to understand old places and thoughts. I believe allow the pain to become less.

[J Todd Underhill]

Very good work! I enjoyed this one. If you are interested I do a podcast for poetry and poets www.facebook.com/coffeewithunderhill

[Nicole Laszlo]

I might be! Thank you.

[William Liston]

This piece reminds me of how people can use art to express what they can't say. Whether writers, musicians, or painters, I think most artists (espeically those in pain) seek to convey their emotions through ways that regular words can't express ... it really helps in being felt -- not just understood. That's how I interpreted this piece: an artist's journey to express herself. I interpreted the "empty halls" image as a symbol of despair and the "writing on walls" analogy as a symbol of how one can express themselves in despair. I like how the imagery is open to interpretation too, as anyone who has ever tried to express themselves should be able to place themselves in the speaker's shoes. Overall, I thought the feel of this piece was the highlight ... it was haunting yet cathartic.

One minor quibble: I'd change the second line (an all other lines like it) to read, "As I wonder THROUGH empty halls." To me, using the word "through" (as opposed to the word "these") helps to create a clearer image because it conveys the speaker actually traveling in motion ~ the word "these" doesn't add much in my opinion.

- William Liston

[Nicole Laszlo]

Okay, so that was a fantastic review. Thank you. I'm glad you appreciated (and caught) the open imagery. I'll take your "through" thought into account, I hadn't thought of that before. But I will say, the lack of movement was intentional. At that point in my life I felt trapped. Again, thank you for the awesome review.