-The Quietus-

Death..

I think is a lady

Dressed in black 

Wrapped in grey

Veiled in astray

Disgraced till eternity..

She creeps slowly

Floating like a dark cloud

Galloping the bright sky

And Everything around

dozes off to her screaming lullaby..

She sobs in fright

Looking at the grave sight

Of her victims 

That once lived

and with her touch of love

have now died..

She cuddles and embraces

filling the hollow spaces

between her petite arms

Hoping someday someone

could listen to the sound 

of her frozen unbeating heart.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that you have tuned into a child's perceptions brilliantly, this is an enthralling read! Thanks

[-GB-]

I am afraid the poem is written through the perception of someone who understands and feel for death..her love for life..i have nowhere intended to bring a child's psychology into it.

But am really glad you liked it :) Thanks to you.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Ok thank you, it is useful to disingush your intentions from the reader's perceptions, given you have not included notes for guidance, I still like my interpretation, because your writing evoked some fascinating memories of my childhood imaginings and misjudgments....nice to meet you

[-GB-]

Its kind of pleasing to see in how many ways your perception of your own writing can be perceived by readers..I thought you should know in what state of mind this was written..and its nice to know your perception of it.

Its a pleasure..keep reviewing..id look forward.

[Sid]

Wow great write...this must have taken some vivid imagination and i especially like the last stanza...great work!!

[-GB-]

Thank you sid! :D

[Sid]

Sure...Read my poem Sweven if you like. It's my take on death...though definitely not quite as different as yours for sure :)

[-GB-]

Sure.

[Akshat♥]

Have U ever seen death...?? lol
Fantastic imagination came directly from your heart..
Here death is expressed like a fairy tail..
In my opinion death can have one side like this..
But the other side of this is very much existing..
Keep writing!! :)

[-GB-]

I have been close enough multiple times but didnt have the pleasure to know her this way..its my mere imagination..:)

Thanks.

[Akshat♥]

You are always welcome dear :)

[Sami Khalil]

She cuddles and embraces
filling the hollow places.
A nice write.

[-GB-]

Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of "the black widow"---

although this speaker doesn't seem to be killing hearts on purpose...

i have felt that sometimes my love is the kiss of death..

that i am someone others should stay away from.

intriguing piece with strong imgery..kind of Poeish...

jacob

[-GB-]

Thanks for the words Jacob..I blended my personality and the infamous death and the outcome was this..Some of us just prefer being on the darker side of everything.

[Dreaming lord]

this poem is good, something different i have read after a long time, it made me realize.. one thing.. even the worst n scary things in this world needs love. u got a wild imagination..... which is very rare for an indian... n i appreciate that.. :)

[-GB-]

Death has been the subject of fascination for me for a long time now..in my opinion.. different is always good..I appreciate your words! :)