A Tinge Of Orange Among The Gray

A Tinge Of Orange Among The Gray

A Poem by Nirupama.H

A Tinge of Orange Among the Gray


A tinge of orange among the gray,

A grotesque ditch, a violent fray.

The rising smoke, the blue-green bay;

“It’s all in the past!” that’s what they say.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The sail blown down, there it lay.

The white-clad men, lost in play;

All disappeared by the end of May.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The moth wings drifting, floating astray.

The hot pots burning made of clay;

Bubbling, bubbling, bubbling away.

 

A tinge of orange among the gray,

The black skies part, the white clouds stay.

The pink berries grow, in branches gay;

Until darkness lost; fay, fay.


© 2016 Nirupama.H



Author's Note

Nirupama.H
Picture courtesy: Google

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Really loved the rhyming words you used in this piece. Also your concept of comparing lives with colors is also a stark comparison. Indeed life is similar to a palette of colours. Sometimes the days are bit of grey but then there are bright days like orange too. :)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the comment :)



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Amazing use of description.
"A tinge of orange among the gray,
The moth wings drifting, floating astray.
The hot pots burning made of clay;
Bubbling, bubbling, bubbling away."
I liked the above lines a lot. I enjoyed the complete poem and thank you Nirupama for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thank you. I'm really glad you liked it.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did and you are welcome.
So many soothing images here....I love how they're all combined with the theme of disintegration - it makes this poem have a distinctively forlorn mood.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot for reading and commenting on my poem.
I'm glad you liked it :)
Really loved the rhyming words you used in this piece. Also your concept of comparing lives with colors is also a stark comparison. Indeed life is similar to a palette of colours. Sometimes the days are bit of grey but then there are bright days like orange too. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the comment :)
I have no idea what you tried to show, but all I saw was an image of a pyre, perhaps the funeral of a loved one? The orange of the flames, the way it is all now part of a past, themen in white, the pots of clay burning... also, grey is a sombre colour, a symbol of seriousness, of loss.
I may not be right, but that didn't stop me from being swept away by the words. Truly spectacular!!




Posted 1 Year Ago


Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thank you ..
Like I've said to the others , the colours symbolize every contrast we see in l.. read more
Enjoyable read... I will of course contemplate the symbolism which dull witted creatures such as myself may or may not properly fathom...maybe a little hint here and there in the authors notes would help slow-walk me to an epiphany! Loved the rhyme...Great work!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thank you .
Like I've said to the others , the colours symbolize every contrast we see in lif.. read more
nirupama,

Real flashes on collecting nature's bounty to the motionless words
Hope you have enjoyed its creation and the whispering of feathers of
WORDS during the process
Carry on pl.....

M P Ramesh

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thank you :)
M P Ramesh

1 Year Ago

welcome

MPR
I loved the aesthetically pleasing vision this created in my head. I honestly had to read below to figure out what it signified, but I can see that with the contrasts. Thank you for the lovely read.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

thank u :)
I love the imagery in this!


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Very creative!
Well done!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

1 Year Ago

Thank you :)
I expect as others have said, there is something beyond the words here that are not know to me, But beautiful words that flow very nicely.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

The contrast of a vibrant colour like orange against gray just feels nice to me. That's why i used t.. read more
Willard Wells

2 Years Ago

Ok and thanks for your view.
Nirupama.H

2 Years Ago

Thank YOU :)

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