Trapped In The Open

trapped in myself

i am a fiend.
i can't settle
Down until
i Speed
up.

no luck for me.
now what?
the clock is
counting
  Down
     Down
        Down

uncomfortable perch.
my back is in pain.
no time for Me!
no time for
gains.

it would be strange
if there were something normal
to compare it to.

no luck for me,
no Love for me.
just work
and lost time
utilized
toward
a very
dull
potential.

too long,
too long.
to far
for me.

i can't settle
Down until
i Speed
up.

Reviews

[Lee]

"no luck for me,
no Love for me.
just work
and lost time
utilized
toward
a very
dull
potential."

Best line that is...
I really liked the visual play on words. There was a definite childlike quality throughout, despite it clearly reflecting the worries of an adult. And I appreciated the counter-intuitive approach with going towards that more storybook-like poetic format. I almost could see illustrations come to life in my head. lol Well done on this piece. It's well written, strong and creatively unique.

[ikibala222]

wow thank you so much!!!!