Today

Far above expectations

Low below dreams

Lies the harsh reality

That goes unseen

How I wish for hope

How I wish for smile

Which went far away

For quite a few while

Where once stood love

Now sits hate

Expectations are curse

The ultimate fate

Standing back on feet

I stare my world

Emotions gets better of me

Which makes me wanna hurl.

Reviews

[Ravenwing]

Good start. I would suggest to keep a steady rhythm, such as 'for a while' or 'for quite a while' (instead of 'for quite a few while' because to me it seems awkward, beat-wise). The rhymes are not a bad start. Sometimes if I need a rhyme I use online rhyming lists or a thesaurus. But it is a good start and these are just suggestions. You have a voice in you! Keep writing! :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u So much. Even i use them for references

[Ravenwing]

No problem and cool:)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

I enjoyed this and can see a lot of promise in your ability as a writer.. Keep on keeping on...

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank you Ma'am. That will encourage me alot (:

[Haley Wilson]

Your poems motivate me to write more honestly. Keep writing and improving on them!

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank You So Much For That Kind Words Maam (:

[Arshia]

'Expectations are curse, The ultimate fate!'
Very well written Nitesh! :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank you so much Maam

[Sami Khalil]

Sounded like a story. I like it a lot....:).....

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thanks Alot Sir

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Matching Socks]

Sometimes reality hits us like a slap in the face. I get the impression this is about a broken heart.
Nicely done Nitesh.

[Nitesh Mahabal]

You Always Find The Background Story Well. Thank u Maam

[free will]

"Expectations are a curse"...so true, keep it up ;)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u so mch

[Cholontic]

As I read this poem, I thought about my recent break up and the feelings that it brought. You have a way with words that bring out the truth of a situation and, yet, entertains with enlightenment. Thank you for sharing this piece with me. I'm truly grateful.

[Nitesh Mahabal]

M glad u felt that way. I had the same feeling while writing this one

[Stephanie K.]

I read all of your pieces and this one is my absolute favorite. You are one who truly gets better with every piece of writing. Very well done.

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Well i hope u like my upcomings too. Thank u maam

[Bella]

Good job, I like this poem a lot.

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u maam. I hope ull like my other works too.