Beyond the Sapphire Line

Beyond the Sapphire Line

A Poem by Nix
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This was a long time coming. Honeypot and I set each other the challenge to write a poem for a picture of our choice. I had a little writers block but I hope its worth the wait. :)

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Beyond the sapphire line of the salty azure depths
Seagulls sail the brisk blue winds for somewhere safe to rest
Tip-toeing the Glacier Mountains of her cobalt crystal specks
They tinker with what looks like rocks, her copper tinted flesh

With ports of quartz and armour, the sunshine soaring blaze
Was lost to fluttering fishes rises a feral ocean spray
Partial to moving flocks not rocks the seagull’s flap away
And there below the skyline walks the graceful mermaid.
 


© 2009 Nix



Author's Note

Nix
Thanks to Honeypot for the piccy!

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Yep, definitely worth the wait. It was very beautifully written. Not sure why
I thought it seemed cold yesterday, except I was freezing, but today I don't get
that impression. You have some really wonderful descriptions in this one.
"Beyond the sapphire line of the salty azure depths" is my favorite line, but I also
liked " feral ocean spray". It has your usual delicate style, but its powerful too.
The words are strongly placed and its obvious that you put some thought into it.

You did a really good job. I wondered what you'd make of it and although this
wasn't exactly what I expected it is wonderful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Truly a sophisticated write. Your expressions always have a certain "ting" like spoon on a wine glass.

Keep writing Nixie.
Punishment

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautifully lyrical "her cobalt crystal specks" filled with imaginative imagery taking us to a very private, personal place . and finally as the gulls are gently pushed aside an image of endless beauty and mystic the mermaid beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yep, definitely worth the wait. It was very beautifully written. Not sure why
I thought it seemed cold yesterday, except I was freezing, but today I don't get
that impression. You have some really wonderful descriptions in this one.
"Beyond the sapphire line of the salty azure depths" is my favorite line, but I also
liked " feral ocean spray". It has your usual delicate style, but its powerful too.
The words are strongly placed and its obvious that you put some thought into it.

You did a really good job. I wondered what you'd make of it and although this
wasn't exactly what I expected it is wonderful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This is great, I love this! I do love poems about nature, but you've added
such detail, color, and life here. I felt like I was looking into a blue
cleared ocean where I can see all the way into it's depths. These
words are felt too...like a fresh, splashly feeling;). Kudos for
a great job!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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