Salty Affection

Salty Affection

A Poem by Nix
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This is something I wrote a long time ago but forgot how much I like it. Its sad but I thnk we've all been here.

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I look up at her and she looks back
Assuring nothing but compassion
But there I watch the bluest oceans
Pain her cheeks with their salty affection
With trembling lips she smiles
But its a smile of deception
Who is she?
This is not me
And this is not my reflection

© 2009 Nix



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Short sweet and to the point. Sometimes we get so wrapped up in thw orld that we lose the essence of who we are. I must I have been there more times then I would like to admit but I have learned through it all that without being yourself then your destined to have fake people in your life. Once you become true to yourself then you will find people who will be true to u.


Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Whoa. Nic, this is beautifully written! I liked how you described the "crying" part. Clever choice of words, which gave a strong impact on this piece. Of course, I truly, truly liked these lines:

"bluest oceans
Pain her cheeks with their salty affection"

A brilliant write, as always. :)


Posted 7 Years Ago


I was confused at first. But then aha! So many times we look in to the mirror and see somebody else that is us, but not us. very good poem. lots of depth and emotions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


At the beginning, I thought it was about two different people, and so I was surprised by the ending about the reflection in the mirror. It was interesting, and there was an edge of desperation to it, almost frantic but subtle. I enjoyed the mood of this one.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short sweet and to the point. Sometimes we get so wrapped up in thw orld that we lose the essence of who we are. I must I have been there more times then I would like to admit but I have learned through it all that without being yourself then your destined to have fake people in your life. Once you become true to yourself then you will find people who will be true to u.


Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OH MY! This is something that really just touches my heart. I love the lines and they are so simple yet they hold such complexity! Goodness...I loved this piece!

JaniceAnn

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

im really loving this poem. thanks lost rose for requesting it for me. short, but such a strong impact. i like the part abuot "decption" and how when you look at her, you can't undersatnd how you are with someone like that, esp considering who we date is a reflection of who we are. great write! i'll ad you as a friend.

Kena

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ok.. Absence sharpens love... presence strengthens it... Salty affection?.. hummm My this is very familiar.. also...Wrote by Mr. Rose.. so ... it tells me that.. this is one of your poems you love.. yes!

I see this.. in your poetry...a minute or a second in solitude..



Posted 8 Years Ago


This was a deep write. And yes I've been there. This was truly a great write. Nicely done. I loved it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is short and sweet and hits the spot long time no see how's life on the south coast?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow Nix if I could drop a poem like this I would consider myself a poet instead of a guy who writes stuff. I enjoyed this poem, the length is short but the thought provoking piece will live way pass this review. Excellent write. One of my favorites. I plan to share this with my other WC friends through read requests. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Hi, my names Nic, better known as Nixie on the popular writing site called Booksie. I've been using the site for a while now and decided to venture out a bit. I'm planning on posting the best of my ol.. more..

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