In the storm alone

In the storm alone

A Story by Nourhan
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It's just a thought

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She was standing by her own 
She was at the centre of the storm alone 
Everything was unclear 
Everything was terrible 
The noise was getting up at the same moment when a killer silence spreading around .
Her heart was racing 
She knew , the this was the end 
The darkness was controlling the situation 
Yeah , yeah of course this was the end obviously. 
She felt a cold liquid running on her face 
It was her blood .
damn! , she thought that , the blood is must be warm , even in that she was wrong. 
Okay , this absolutely was her end 
She looked while the challenging was radiating from her brown eyes and said with screaming tone , " I will not wait the end until it comes and kills me ;
I will obtrude it myself ;
With every single piece of my mind , heart , and soul ;
I will do it , i will go to my end by my whole desire, and make it a new beginning ;
I'm the only one who decide how will i became ; 
I will change my destiny 
I'm the only one who make my own future;  
Whatever will happen i will never give up" . 
Then she jumped directly to the deepest part of the storm. 

© 2017 Nourhan



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Loving the raw bravery and determination this screams!

Posted 3 Months Ago


It would appear English is not your first language. If I may suggest a few corrections that may help the passage flow.

standing by her own- 'standing ON her own'

the this was the end- 'THAT this was the end'

running on her face- 'running DOWN her face'

blood is must be warm- 'blood must be warm'

wait the end until it comes- 'wait until the end comes'

how will I became- 'how I will become'

only one who make my own future- 'only one who WILL make my own future'

It seems a lot but it's just a few minor missing words or sentence structures. I did really like the passage, especially that last line. :)


Posted 3 Months Ago


i love this aw it's great. i love the last line

Posted 4 Months Ago


Nourhan

4 Months Ago

Thanks for your words, appreciate it ❤
Last stanza I loved it more than the rest of the poem, I loved it...:)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Nourhan

5 Months Ago

Thanks, but you know it's not a poem , i considered it a short writing or something like that
This is worth the read. I can feel that you have really put your heart in this piece. well done!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Nourhan

5 Months Ago

Thank you a lot 😊😊
i feel like she's swimming into the storm through to the other side


Posted 5 Months Ago


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Nourhan

5 Months Ago

Yeah correct, pray for her to reach the safe side 😊😊
Very well written!
Never stop writing and never stop sharing your beautiful words with us.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Nourhan

5 Months Ago

Thanks, you're always nice 😊😊

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