I am a star

I am a star

A Story by Nora
"

Can you understand her ?

"
"Who are you ? " He asked confusedly 
She laughed sorely and whispered,  "I am a star"
He looked at her deprecatingly and said " really!  , but i have never watched you on TV before,  i think you have a serious mental illness"  
She smiled a half smile while she was flipping her dark short hair 
" you are such an idiot,  exactly like all of the people here , i am a star literally,  star like those stars above us , i think you will never understand me " she said and pop out , but his voice stopped her 
" wait , just tell me more " he shouted 
She looked at him and then looked at the sky with shining green eyes " I am a star , exactly like the stars above  , they are shining beautifully from a distance but if you get closer you will find flaming stuffs " she explained. 
The sky began to rain so she stopped speaking and closed her eyes , But he became more confused so he said " what do you mean ? , i can't understand anything " 
She smiled and said " see ! , I told you...." 
Then she pop out between the heavy rain and disappeared like ghost. 

© 2017 Nora



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This is an imaginative snippet full of good imagery. I like the riddle-like conversation, leaving the reader not really knowing what it all means, but still an enjoyable read.

In this line: "i am a star literally, star like those stars above us" . . . you use the word "star" so much, it begins to feel repetitive. Instead of using the same words over & over, try to find new ways of repeating the same information. Here's an example for the above quoted line: "i am a star literally, just like the ones that are twinkling above us"

All in all, nicely playful & sassy & showing attitude from both characters (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago


Nora

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much for your note , appreciate it
I like how you made a conversation inside it, I enjoyed reading this good job!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Happy to hear that, thanks 😊
I like the descriptiveness i might be bias cause I have green eyes haha but I like it keep writing and work on the little things like grammar

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Well, let's replace yours with mine 😂😇
bella

6 Months Ago

deal haha we'll figure it out
Nora

6 Months Ago

Lol 😂😂😂👍👍👍
The story was very interesting, and it has that element of attachment to the unknown. The boy wants to know who/what the star is, and he questions her until she disappears to the rain. Great job.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Thanks chris, happy to hear that 😊
Chris

6 Months Ago

I'm glad you're happy then. :)
I like the ending how the star disappeared because of the rain. It seemed like a plot twist to me. (Just improve on the grammar, spelling, and proper capitalization)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your review, i am trying to improve but my progress is slow because I am busy with my.. read more
Psychotic Lily

6 Months Ago

I like your spirit. Don't ever give up!
Nora

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your kindness, appreciate it ❤ ❤
This was a really good short story, I loved the little witty comments the star would say to the boy. Keep on writing!!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your visit and review 😊
aha...nice write...keep going.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Thank you wajiha 😊
I loved it..amazing piece dear..keep writing!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Happy for that 😊, thanks ❤❤
Sofia

6 Months Ago

You're welcome 😊
Curious and a brilliant answer, and that answer can be related to many.....
I liked it...:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


i absolutely love this piece. it's very mysterious and it's beautiful as i can feel the emotion in both characters very well. good job!!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Nora

6 Months Ago

Yeah happy for that 😊 i feel like i made this better than before, thanks for your reviews , and.. read more

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