Disappearing lakes engulfing disenchanted thoughts The lack of coherence embedded in sand Windshield moist with raindrops on forgotten mornings I have not come to accept it, not yet.
A town full of blind people, Colors taking a walk into dark alleys Undeveloped photos fading in silver The road in front is not visible, at all.
I like these words. Each line could take you to a different place. This is my favorite kind of poetry. Allow the reader to think and try to see what the writer is saying in their words. Many vision of people and life are hidden in the word. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote
Whoa! That was fantastic. Definitely something that speaks to reader depending on their own state of mind. Both powerful stanzas all on their own. You could probably separate and make two new poems from them. Really great stuff.
mmm essence of evanescence :) "the lack of coherence embedded in sand". and the two lines concluding the two stanzas
"i have not come to accept it, not yet"
and
"the road in front is not visible, at all"
asking for a different path to follow...
excellent!
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I like these words. Each line could take you to a different place. This is my favorite kind of poetry. Allow the reader to think and try to see what the writer is saying in their words. Many vision of people and life are hidden in the word. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote
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