Wait For Her

Its hella short and absolute crap, but its about my girlfriend. This is kinda a spur of the moment poem, and its actually the first poem I ever wrote that I wasn't forced to do by a teacher so....

I wait for her to walk into a room and send a flurry of butterflies through my stomach.
I wait to see her hair golden hair that floats, streaked with highlights from spring sunm

I wait for her to walk into a room and send shivers up my spine and chills through my body.
I wait to her eyes, the greenish-blue hue that gives me memories of the ocean. Her eyes are wide and for-like. They convey her emotion and in just one look, I can tell how she feels.

I wait for her. I wait to her laugh and see her smile. I wait for her to sit beside me and fill my nose with her familiar sent. I wait for her to turn towards me and whipser in my ear. I wait for the moment where I fall even more in love with her than I did the day before.

I love her. I will wait for her.

Author's Note

This is still pretty shut, but I took your advice and tried to describe more her. I hoped it worked.

Reviews

[Anastasia]

This poem is so beautifully sweet. I'm positive your girlfriend loves it. I think you did a marvelous job describing how she looks and how she makes you feel, it made my heart melt just reading it. Absolutely heartfelt and gorgeous.

[Spilt]

This purely sends the message of love-its awesome!

[Hanlan Paquin]

This poem is absolutely beautiful, You did a really nice job describing her.

[Shattered Rose]

OMG yes this is amazing I'm glad you took my advice

[Red]

Thank you!

[Hanlan Paquin]

I would recommend going into more depth about how she makes you feel. I can tell you really like this person.

[Shattered Rose]

You should go deeper. try to put more than emotion into the writing, write like this person is surrounding you, in your breath, in your sky, in your everything.