Compensation

The mystery lifted. 

Or should have been lifted. But the night

Stands in my way. I don't fight. 

Instead I compensate. Hang onto

Words of  a one track mind.

Guess what I have on mine. 

A flicker. A switch of electricity.

How does that compare to us? Your tongue

I never tasted, but your air wrapped

Me in ochre. I might savour the

Sour cherry lick of their offers. 

But your's is black cherry. 

And stains my mouth forever. 

Reviews

[Caradoc]

This really makes me want to kiss someone...

Nice imagery. It makes me wonder though...Did you write this after kissing someone? Or did you write it because of someone you wanted to kiss? Either way, this poem tells me you are a very passionate individual, much more so than others your age that I have met in my time.

I think my favorite lines are the last two, like Ta'Shandra below me. To have mouth forever stained by a kiss...I know what that's like. Of course, I have the benefit of not having to ponder longingly over the one who left it. I still have my black cherry kisser.

Well done.

-Caradoc

[BigDaddySiddle]

i could deffinately feel the love! not like others i have seen which give me an erection! very good, keep it up!

[Steve]

I love the romantic feel to this one. It sounds like the writer is tempting someone too. :0)

[Tasha]

"But your's is black cherry.
And stains my mouth forever."

This was amazing, I loved it. :)