The Promenade of the Jewelled Night Sea

Sparkle (sparkle)

Twinkle, iris prism.

For you keep me.

Amaranth princess, shore.

(No Eris lover)

Drink heliotrope 

In a palace, distress

No prince (truly)

Mind’s masquerade

And china dove (together?)

Coast harlequin water. 

Your turn.

Aureolin sand? 

Hexagonal cell, the

Jar of shells? (Yes)

Crescent queen

Settled in snowfield

Of the psyche. 

Touch is adagio

But affinity is forever.

Chimes of time (my love)

Echo icterine heat

And be (together)

Pass the final Persian 

Jewel of consciousness

Crown the sea queen

Now let go.

Lanterns have sailed.

Goodnight.

Reviews

[Hayley]

You have made good use of parentheses and the echo effect. It flows really nicely with some odd images, but they are clear and pure images. I think the contradiction of this to the poem of the whole speaks volumes about your talent. Enjoyable read, to say the least!

[Eagle Cruagh]

You have an excellent command of
the language. Your sentences flow
with style and expertise.
Superb construction.'
'Gifted with incredible talent .
---- John

[Shadow Spirit]

This actually reminds me of my character in one of my books. Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed this. ~DMX

[Ian Faraway]

I love the echoes and the use of parenthesis, it kind of "bolds" the images you try to give off.

[Jeremy Baker]

An unusual meter and structure, although none the worse for that. Some beautiful imagery - 'touch is adagio' - as well as some oblique meanings. I'm looking forward to reading more of your poems in the near future.

[Michael of Gilead]

I think Chris hit it spot on.

[Chris]

You've continued to grow and spread jeweled wings... and all as you should. You're earning a place and "becoming". I remember your arrival here and the changes and still more changes as you found more about the person you are. Amethyst - a soft violet growing.

But its easy to tease with pretties and way harder when its the penny-for-a-pound varieties of words that don't require memory or education beyond a collegiate dictionary. Education is becoming too commonplace to continue elite and exclusivity. Be careful about pretense... it can bite.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The imagery you use fuses the reader to the worded bliss, well done, good read.

[RAWR!]

this piece produces a strange set of images in my head, its something out of a fairy-tale.