The Bridge Where The River Ends

Lunar, drifting by the snow flowers. 

Where the stars fall. Are you there?

With night, her heart smiles.

In vain hope that one day

One day (won’t you?)

See her where the river ends.

Once what was distant,

A forgotten life - it soared.

Shining in periwinkle leaves

And touching the heavens.

Farewell for now.

But see her where the river ends.

Veiled for years that passed.

The princeless princess

Who dreamed of the dark

But found her hero amongst

Bright wishes to the sky.

That’s where the river ends.

Waiting with the lights

That float to the moon

A lullaby to the soul

Then silence, where 

We met again.

At the bridge where the river ends.

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Lunar, drifting by the snow flowers. 
Where the stars fall. Are you there?
With night, her heart smiles.
In vain hope that one day
One day (won’t you?)
See her where the river ends.
(This is a very good opening. My problem is “With Night” that does not make sense. Maybe “At night”)

Once what was distant,
A forgotten life - it soared.
Shining in periwinkle leaves
And touching the heavens.
Farewell for now.
But see her where the river ends.

(“What was sounds awkward to me. Periwinkle is a shade of blue, unless you are saying the leaves are blue. This whole stanza did not make sense to me. It was not as clear or well written as the first stanza.)



Veiled for years that passed.
The princeless princess
Who dreamed of the dark
But found her hero amongst
Wishes to the sky.
That’s where the river ends.

(Veiled? Prince-less. Maybe dreamed in the dark because of the veil...)

Waiting with the lights
That float to the moon
A lullaby to the soul
Then silence, where 
We met again.
At the bridge where the river ends.

(I’ll say this is a good closing. The second-third line I’m not sure about. But I do love the repetition of “At the bridge where the river ends.” Also maybe include why the bridge is important. Is this where the princess met her lover?)