Unrequited Hate.

Two haikus. The last line is off my two syallables... Sorry about that. It's about my exboyfriend. He has type one diabetes. Enjoy.

 

I often feel your

Unrequited hate deep in

My soft heart and jaw.

 

Maybe we will make

Amends. Before your

Diabetes kills us all.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

The end hold out hope, yet i find myself wandering what has caused the hate? Perhaps it's hatred of the situation he finds himself in?
I like it, I think it needs another piece to bring out the meaning overall a little bit more. Like what you have is part two and three, I wonder what part one would say?

Keep up the good work!
Infinity's Shadow

[Bhavya Kaushik]

The closing line for me outstands! It is indeed so powerful!
But it is really so beautifully sad...

[Glee]

Love turned to hate. Thats never a good thing and turning it into a diabetic attack could kill a man. I somehow feel sorry for him. Don't you think a little kid's gloves might help heal the past sorrow.

[Vanessa]

Oh... it seems that a bit of hostility thrown in with something sweet makes for a nice peom!!
You dished this out nicely, but I find it a bit odd, the last last line. It's not bad, I just feel nervous that he doesn't see this X)

Great job.
//Vanessa Alyse