Falling Apart

There are no words left to say

And no tears left to shed

The happiness ebbs like the tide coming ashore

Take away my being, take away my life

 

My heart is torn

My soul; battered

Too many losses
And too many close calls

 

I can't stand the thought of losing another

There's just so much I can't handle

I try seeing the light but there's always a cloud

How can I see myself out when it seems

Everything else is falling apart

Reviews

[deeps]

My heart is torn
My soul; battered
Too many losses
And too many close calls

I can really feel the emotion in these words here.
This is a wonderful expressed write here.
Awesome write!

[George Love]

Much better flow to this version. I think you got it right and you express your emotions very well.

[George Love]

Sounds like a person on the edge of depression, so hard to fight back this time of year. Keep moving, working and smiling, evne though the smile might be fake. Well written, and it has some tweaks before it is really a great work.