A Slave Of The Ocean

28/1/13 Time is deceiving, gone before you know it

The tide swings high,
An acrobat without implication,
It holds no remorse for air it defies
As the clock does for me
With it's clutching hands that permit my pathetic plunder
Under scarlet waves.

I surrender,
I sink but still float with no remote wave
To grant me salvation.

Kind winds offer ripples
But still I'm a slave of the ocean,
Paralytic by kelp arms that tie mine down
With a satirical smile,
Immortally swinging around me.

Time is tender
And with it we render the writings on our final bed

Reviews

[Kyle Sky]

Beautiful in its words and depth in meaning. There's is a sense of beauty and aggression in your words. It's quite attractive to the reader's view. Wonderful piece.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Kyle

[Mary Christabel George]

"Time is tender
And with it we render the writings on our final bed "

This is such a powerful line.......!!!!!!!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! I hoped it would be a good line to close on

[Mary Christabel George]

Indeed it is....

[The Nude Writer]

Beautiful :) I love the ocean.. It is so fierce and peaceful at the same time :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Wild and so very wonderful :)

[Tarry Franck]

Very well done - very powerful - I agree with you- find beauty in such danger.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! Your review is highly appreciated. :)

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure

[RachelReaper]

the imagery in this was awesome! It reminds me of the time i was at the beach and it was storming. Bad idea, i know, but watching the waves stirring up was pretty in its own dangerously destructive way.

[Ohhhwillow]

It's strange that we often find was is dangerous, powerful and destructive to be so beautiful, thank you Rachel. :)

[Ethale Captor]

An excellent write. I love the imagery.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! I find imagery is my best gateway for expression

[Ethale Captor]

Only when you are a master of it, as you are.

[marie]

.....wow....i really don't know what to say about this....its lovely....thank you for sharing this..

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank YOU for reviewing this! :)

[marie]

its not problem:) i enjoyed it:)

[Dalia]

wisely said Willow,
well penned you have the soul of the poet in you.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Dalia for your kind review!

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Nice imagery indeed!
and i know the feeling of slavery, though salvation is in the reach.

[Ohhhwillow]

I hope you are right, thank you for reviewing

[C.C. Marx]

Time, we just never seem to have enough of it these days, great job!!

[Ohhhwillow]

Agreed, aren't we all so consumed by trivialities? It always seems to be one step ahead. Thank you!

[C.C. Marx]

Agreed my friend agreed, my pleasure of course