Moonlit Avenue

This poem holds special meaning to me, as it's one I wrote for a special someone. I hope you enjoy.

On a certain moonlit avenue,

of which many things are new,

my eyes strayed towards one thing,

and that one thing was you.

On a certain moonlit avenue,

where all the people are oh-so-blue,

one thing stood out from the others,

and that one thing was you.

On a certain moonlit avenue,

where you and I both grew,

one thing left and the other stayed,

and that one thing was you.

On a certain moonlit avenue,

my reasons for staying are quite few.

But there was one thing I could never let go,

and that one thing

was you.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think of the repetition. Was it too much/overbearing? Any feedback would be great.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I like the flow of the poem to honest. I think by repeating the 1st and 2nd line in each stanza you gave an attached feeling to the reader which adds a flavor to the overall purpose of the poem. The middle two lines of each stanza presented variations of descriptions which I have really enjoyed...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Oliver Free]

Thank you, I appreciate the review

[Addict With a Pen]

I like it, I think some people might have been turned away by the first part that repeats "On a certain moonlit avenue"
On the other hand, I think It flows nicely, and I think it was good to keep a pattern. I do like that line, it adds a little mystery as well as a forbidden love feel.

[Oliver Free]

Thank you for the feedback!