Heart of Steel

Harsh past i forgot so soon,
Painful experiences vanishes swiftly,
But the blemish never goes,
Reawakening concealed sorrows,
The rage precipitously crucify my trust,
The trust i have for any giver of love,
They all deceive and lie,
Carrying their bags of unseen truth
Dressed in their rotten suit,
I build a shield,
To protect me on this love field,
I snatch breath out of my heart,
So it doesnt feel the touch of cupid's arrow,
Caring is therefore sinful,
As smiling no longer becomes visible,
Being passionate irritates my soul,
As making money is now my only goal,
I no longer feel those soft touch,
The ones that have sharp thorns,
My soul is cold,
My weak side has been sold,
Everything is black,
As my mind towards love is dark,
I find it hard to feel,
My heart is now made of steel.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Penny]

I relate very much to this piece, especially the first half. Although, at the same time it is very personal. For someone who doesn't live by these rules, this image you have can be little scary but for me it is something I aspire to be, the person I am becoming. Very well.

[Niall Madden]

steel in indeed, the transformation from a loving passionate individual to someone who is cold, unfeeling and focuses on profit was brought in the poem.

[Stephen]

Wow. Very well done my friend. I feel you on this one. I can relate. I doubt true love, the kind of love that you find in movies doesn't seem possible, just a dream that turns into a nightmare. Thanks for sharing my friend.

[Olumegbon]

rightly said, thanks for reading.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Powerful poetry! love, or weakness, can make us numb.....and can stir all kinds of other issues which we do not always see as problems......it is ironic sometimes how we think we are protecting ourselves, but then our walls crash inwards and manage to continue the cycle of hurt.

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot for the review.

[ali]

I could relate to this so much. Someone who was once weak, and thoughtful, and caring, and loving. Turning back on your past self because it feels so necessary, like it's tiring to be neglected and betrayed. Specially when someone so dear to you crushes your trust and love. And thinking that you can't be in that shoes again, you just have to build yourself bigger and bolder and stronger. Which results to feeling so little. That's just my opinion anyway, it's how i view this poem.

Great work! :D

[Olumegbon]

your review clearly shows how well you understand it...it's a sad truth about life. thanks for reading.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I feel sadness and empathy for the protagonist to have had an open heart of gold turn into a closed heart of steel. It is truly sad when that happens to the innocent ones because of someone else's cynicism, making them turn into cynics themselves, breeding a cynical society. I hope the protagonist realizes someday that it's no way to go, only heart full of openness and love can make the world a better place.

[Olumegbon]

rightly understood, thanks for understanding. I appreciate

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

always a pleasure!

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard way to live when the heart turn to steel.
"Everything is black,
As my mind towards love is dark,
I find it hard to feel,
My heart is now made of steel. "
I like the story leading to the strong ending. Thank you my Poet friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot, i really appreciate.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Hard feelings, but after a cloud there's surely some sunshine. Good poem. :) Rudi

[Olumegbon]

very true, thanks alot.

[wordman]

lots of deep feelings in this write my friend,it borders on depression of the soul

[Olumegbon]

Thanks alot for reading, i appreciate.

[Jamestown]

Great piece of work that many including myself will relate to!
Very emotional and sad suffering because of past lies and deception
but my friend the only way to fix a broken heart is to love
again, I know easier said then done but I'm speaking from
experience, really enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Olumegbon]

Rightly said...thanks very much friend, I really appreciate.