Goodbye

heartbreak from a woman's point of view

Goodbye,
Who knew words did carry thorns,
The couch caressing my butt,
My cardigan cuddling my soul,
The breeze whispering in my ears,
Bringing the tears hanging on to my eyes,
I cry in pain,
The hurt is from within,
Where did I go wrong,
Tired of battling with this sad song,
Thought my heartbeat was what you saw,
That made you promise me the world,
Our late night conversations,
Filled with promises for the future,
Never thought they will wither away,
I lowered my dignity to serve you my virginity,
Now I question your integrity,
The lesson becomes a huge slap from reality,
Nevertheless my flesh wants you back,
Still fragile to your deceptive words,
My bed now frightens me,
The torture of memories it feeds my mind,
Constantly hunting my emotions,
I thirst for the day we cross path again,
So i can ask why you said goodbye.

Author's Note

Your opinion matters a lot....

Reviews

[J3ssInJupit3r]

I am in love with this. The insane emotion that flows through your aching words captivates me, makes me cling to your every sentence. The flow, though it does not rhyme, is perfect and I am glad you chose for it to not because this way it conveys your raw emotions that much more. I hope that one day I can write as well as this! So beautiful.

[Tiana]

I can appreciate your raw emotions in this wonderfully written poem! Great job!

[Saddam]

It is hard to accept the goodbye whom you love most.
This is beautifully write and it is carrying a fact too.
Nice to have it.

[Andrew N. Farrens]

Brutal f*****g honesty but with some humorous descriptives. The whole thing smack of utter loneliness and that is something I am very much intimate with. I hope s**t is better. Res Ipsa Loquitur.....

[ApKWrites]

Honestly....the third line made me giggle - I always found the word "butt" quite funny.
As for the rest of the poem - I like the flow, the wording and the feeling it shows!
Great Job!

[Olumegbon]

hehe, i know right. thanks so much

[~EO]

First off I'd like to say thank you for this piece of art because it was beautifully written, and what I really liked about it was the yin and yang between tactfulness and bluntness. Great execution and a beautiful way with relation to the reader.

[Olumegbon]

i really appreciate the fact that you understand the poem, thanks for your review

[~EO]

your very welcome.

[Benson Osuji]

lovely you make the lines to bring alive emotion and reality

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
the delivery is fantastic, great job with the straight forward
approach of sad and real emotions:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Olumegbon]

thanks a lot, I really appreciate.

[Olumegbon]

thanks a lot, I really appreciate.

[Abhishek Ram]

This poem just killed me... this was absolutely amazing and this hits you straight on with the saddest of emotions. This can also be the guy's side of things, btw, and you've made this absolutely relatable! Awesome!

[Olumegbon]

I'm overwhelmed by your review, thanks a lot. I appreciate.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest words in the poetry.
"I thirst for the day we cross path again,
So i can ask why you said goodbye."
Goodbyes are never easy. Especially the ones that break our heart. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Olumegbon]

Thanks a lot Coyote, I gladly appreciate.

[Sultrysoul]

You are welcome my friend :)