Cupid's Victim

Cupid's Victim

A Poem by Omikron


Kissed by a feather
Touched by the wind
Without my knowledge
My soul was skinned

My heart was pinned
Hung on your wall
A beauty enslaved
I became your doll

No floor to crawl
A slave to the heart
I wish I'd been killed
By cupid's dart

Displayed like art
A body enframed
Nothing left but a mind
That can never be tamed

© 2017 Omikron



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I loved the flow of this, my favorite line was " I wish I'd been killed by cupid's dart" great job Cheré

Posted 7 Months Ago


Great flow throughout this piece. Interesting and well written. I like it! A very unique poem,which makes it all the better.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Great rhythm, and definate feeling of being lovesick ...great piece!

Posted 8 Months Ago


It's sometimes difficult to keep the continuous rhyme in a poem. But you've done it in great style.
Cupids arrow may hit. But that doesn't mean a bed of roses.


Posted 8 Months Ago


fun in rhyming but such a serious hurt put on your speaker .. i am an admitted optimist (to the chagrin of wife and friends sometimes) and so am happy in the resilience of your closing lines .. heavily emotive read for me ..its a deep pain no doubt
E.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Omikron

8 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping by and for your comment, much appreciated.

// O
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Digging this one! Prisoner of love....or lust..or a psychopath?!?! All so similar! lol

Posted 9 Months Ago


Omikron

8 Months Ago

I agree, sometimes you can't tell a difference... Thanks for reading and reviewing, means a ton :)read more
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mum
"without my knowledge my soul was skinned " !!!!

this is amazing. the flow is perfect

Posted 9 Months Ago


Omikron

9 Months Ago

Thank you! Looking forward to reading your works as well!

// O
Great skill in rhyming the end of the previous stanza with the start of the next. I appreciate the work involved in that.
The imagery - a trophy on a wall - enslaved - excellent!
"I wish I'd been killed by Cupid's dart" - says it all.
Class!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Omikron

9 Months Ago

I'm so thrilled that you noticed, it was a small detail I just thought of to see how many actually n.. read more
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

As a former exclusive rhymer I would have been very very pleased with this.
It was only right.. read more
Bravo! Sad that there are emotional monsters out there looking to collect relationship trophies. Great topic and presented in a thought provoking way, well done my friend Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Omikron

9 Months Ago

There can never be love if there isn't hatred, and pain makes us love harder. Thank you for reading .. read more
Love this!!
Great idea for a poem!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Omikron

9 Months Ago

Thank you Emily, it's the simplest yet most complex theme that exists, and that is love, and all the.. read more

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Added on January 7, 2017
Last Updated on January 9, 2017
Tags: Cupid, Love, Victim, Ex, Sad, Terror, Valentine

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Omikron
Omikron

Sweden



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