In Trust I Trusted

In Trust I Trusted

A Poem by Omikron
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As always, not satisfied, but I still hope you enjoyed!

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Bones to bones
Figures of clay
Crafted by Gods
Were we

In the chambers of hearts
Sleeps a choking desire
Beneath polished skin
Is greed

A human frame
With the face of an angel
My blood you boiled
Like tea

In trust I trusted
Lord knows I did
Like the sailor trusts
The sea

Prisons you built
With these pillars of trust
Thousands of doors
No key

In trust I trusted
Seduced by my sin
All I learned was how
To bleed





© 2017 Omikron



Author's Note

Omikron
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"...My blood you boiled
Like tea."
Powerful!--as is this entire piece.
High-level work, O.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Both the form and content are to be commended. It blooms like a rose in a thicket of thorns. May the rose ever bloom.

Posted 5 Months Ago


"A human frame
With the face of an angel
My blood you boiled
Like tea"

I just love how it was an effortless gliding between light and darkness, hope and despair. So beautiful.

Posted 9 Months Ago


' Prisons you built ~ With these pillars of trust ~
Thousands of doors ~ No key .. '

This seems to be only a few finely metered words BUT they say so very much. You're near damning trust for the weakness it can be; emotions battered, confidence drowned in the realisation that nothing is certain. Perhaps?

This has such a rawness to it, yet.. your word play is fragile..

Posted 11 Months Ago


The bars and rhymes are neat, and your word choice is dusty, with traces of seduction in it. Fantastic breath while reading, and environment is stark, with traces of dark impressions throughout. Polished and almost bitter. Well penned...

Posted 1 Year Ago


The imagery and the smooth flow of word made me so anxious to keep reading great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Omikron

1 Year Ago

Thank you!

// O
Wow..This is absolutely perfect. Wonderful imagery and this got me into deep. Great write!
Sometimes trusting is very difficult and to have that faith even after getting hurt on the trust itself is something really incredible. In trust I trusted- I really liked this line a lot. Great punch line at the end. Fabulous write, Omikron. Every stanza is amazing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Omikron

1 Year Ago

I am beyond touched by your review, thank you for the kind words, and I am happy you enjoyed the poe.. read more
Joey Nizz

1 Year Ago

great words of depth
Yeah, I totally get this. Good work O.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Omikron

1 Year Ago

Thank you Papaya!

// O
Round of applause! I loved the first stanza and the feeling just grew with each line. I really enjoyed the imagery.

Thanks for sharing,
-OhSnap

Posted 1 Year Ago


Omikron

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, much appreciated! Looking forward to read some of your works to.. read more
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Great title! Superb opening and closing stanzas, your word choices are image filled. Thought provoking read, it feels like the fall out...and the emotional price is the greatest harm where one loses themselves....I enjoyed this. Starzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


Omikron

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing, Starzy! Glad you liked it.

// O

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Tags: Trust, Blood, Horror, Thriller, Story, Telltale, Like, Love, Fresh, Frehfinds, January, Start, Sleep, Dark, Eerie, Scary, Fiction, Broken, Heartbreak, Depression

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Omikron
Omikron

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