In The Green and Glow

In The Green and Glow

In the green and glow of summer

Few places match my own

The bluebells dance in an idle breeze

Sun beats upon the stone

The birds they sing a melody

A rich melodic tune

The trees dance to that very chorus

Entranced by the starling’s croon

In the evening an orange hue

Casts down upon the hills

And as the sun beats for the last

The restless water stills

But what is beauty if unless

You’ve never seen before?

Nineteen years can make an Eden

Seem tiresome evermore

The soul it longs for something new

The eyes aspire to wander

Beauty itself takes many forms

So reach, for pastures yonder.

Reviews

[Im His Daughter]

Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry. I loved the poem!

[Inda]

This is fantastic! I have to say that for such a young writer you sure know your voice, there's a specific tone and a focus to your work that is admirable. this particular piece is quite soothing and yet emboldening. Great job!

[OneAmongstMany]

Thank you for the kind words!

[Taz]

Wow I love this. It was amazing. First it had an awesome structure, flawless. Second it's rhyme scheme was amazing. The imagery that went along with it was also fantastic, I could really visualize your point, and for the record the flow was as consistent of that of a limerick. This is one of the best pieces I have seen in a very long time. If you keep this up I am sure you are going to go very very far in the poetry world. This is raw talent. Again amazing job, keep it up! I would love to read more stuff just like this.

[OneAmongstMany]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

[Gee]

Oh that's good....top of the class go to

[OneAmongstMany]

Thanks you :)

[Rosie Brooklin]

Beautifully written! It has a natural flow that makes it easy to read and enjoyable, as well. Fantastic imagery, too! My only critique would be for the lines "But what is beauty if unless you've never seen before". I understand the message you're trying to convey, but I feel like it could be rewritten to make more sense. Regardless, very well done!

[OneAmongstMany]

Yeah I agree with you, those lines might be a bit confusing. I wrote this some time ago so I feel changing it now would be doing an injustice to my past self if that makes sense. I prefer to leave it and let people take what they will from it. Thank you for the kind words and feedback!

[Rosie Brooklin]

I understand entirely. I have a few works with similar sentiment, as well.

[duff]

This is fantastic writing. Stunning imagery. Intelligent work. I also like the title. Nicely done.

[OneAmongstMany]

Thank you :)

[duff]

You're very welcome