Senses

Senses

A Poem by Sara Muschweck

Your eyes were blinded by the image of the person you could never be,

     that you never saw the person before you.

Your ears were filled with the voices of negativity,

     that you never heard my whispers of encouragement.

Your nose was filled with the acrid scent of the ashes of unrealized dreams,

     that you never knew the sweet smell of our successful future.

Your mouth was filled with the poisons of your past,

     that you never savored the taste of love.

Your touch was numbed by the pain of heart break,

     that you never felt my ache for you.

 

See me as a light in your eyes

Hear me as I sing your praises

Smell the perfume of a life yet lived

Taste my love on your lips

Touch my heart as it is yours!

 


© 2008 Sara Muschweck



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This is a very fluid piece. It reads so easily yet holds a powerful message. I like the way you express love through all of the senses. I got a feeling that the relationship had failed until I read the last 5 lines. They lend a great hope as you invite this person to love.

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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A very nice well written poem. Thank you for sharing...:)............

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow! this is downright powerful! Indeed, we get lost when we live without our senses. We can never appreciate a thing. Life will have no meaning. This is just beautiful!

Posted 8 Years Ago


this is simply beautiful. . . I hope that your message was heard by the one who inspired it. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh how nice and lovely,so inspiring..
ears filled withwrong voices,never heard my whispers
acrid scents of dreams unfulfilled,so you never smelt our happy future
mouth filled with poison of past,wont let you taste my sweet love
so numb ..will not feel my ache for you
see me as light in your eyes
as i sing of you,smell my perfume of life and live
taste love on your lips..touch my heart as it yours
God what lovely images..how sweet..oh thats love
lovely write..



Posted 8 Years Ago


Hi Sara, love this poem to bits. It,s very "if only" material.....which we have all felt in our heart at one time or other. You put it all together very well. Would have like it to be longer.... Thanks for sharing it !!! xx

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. I feel as if I know this experience first hand. I think you have touched on common ground for a lot of people. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I like the flow and the pictures that it paints. x

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very nice very nice!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A lovely contrast of the good and potential in our senses. It is interesting how we can all see the same thing, but often see them differently. Perhaps others can sometimes help to draws us to a new sense of things. Beautiful thoughts. :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

See me as light in your eyes

Hear me as I sing your praises

Smell the sweetness of a life yet lived

Taste my love on your lips

Touch my heart as it is yours



Dear Ophilia

Above words are a true woman's feelings , towards someone she loves dearly!

reflection of feelings in your lover's eyes are the best thing that a woman can give,

accepting & appreciating these golden rays of love is very rare , men usually don't acknowledge them.

Very deep senses indeed.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Sara Muschweck
Sara Muschweck

Along the river, OH



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