Reflection

Reflection

A Poem by Average person

Looking in the mirror,
What is it that you see
The image of a stranger,
Staring back at me
Her eyes twinkle like stars,
Her smile never ends
She doesn't appear to be broken,
She hides her every sin
Underneath this facade,
The reflection does not show
Her heart that's bruised and broken,
What she can't let them know
Looking in the mirror,
Behind the reflection that I see
Stands a hollow girl,
The hollow girl is me

© 2014 Average person


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This was very deep, and I find that I myself relates to seeing a "stranger" in the mirror. but you didn't put any punctuation, I think it would help the reader to know how fast/slow they should read and where the pauses are. other than that, it was great!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Average person

10 Years Ago

thanks. and I see that now I just forget sometimes.. today has been stressful.. but I'll fix it! :)



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Awesome!! Ahh always enjoy reading poetry like this. Brilliant really. Hollow girl. It flowed so well

I enjoyed ^_^

Posted 10 Years Ago


Average person

10 Years Ago

why thanks :)
Simply amazing. The way you utilized rhyme throughout, made your statements all the more powerful. and even though the mirror reflects something that's not there, it's as though your writing is a mirror of yourself. I mean that aspect is obvious. But, seeing these sorts of poems come out of you is like seeing a phenomenon. like watching a fair white maiden leave a mansion, only to realize that no one else sees her. You are that phantom in this piece and in all others. You are something rare and beautiful, and I thank you for this amazing work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Average person

10 Years Ago

Thank you. I'm glad you appreciate my writing much like I appreciate yours. :)
That is deep. I feel like you could have had a line concerning "seeing through" someone, because you really play off the idea of mirrors.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Average person

10 Years Ago

Thanks and thats a good idea.. hmm...
How I so understand what you have written here!!! Pretending that things are fine but feeling so cold and empty; acting out a part, hiding myself behind a facade, so sad and alone. . .

Posted 10 Years Ago


Average person

10 Years Ago

It's always nice to know that someone understand you.. thanks :)
Wow, this is amazing. I'm not even sure if I can say anymore about it...100/100. Surely noteworthy. c:

Posted 10 Years Ago


Average person

10 Years Ago

Why thank you I didn't expect that :3
This was very deep, and I find that I myself relates to seeing a "stranger" in the mirror. but you didn't put any punctuation, I think it would help the reader to know how fast/slow they should read and where the pauses are. other than that, it was great!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Average person

10 Years Ago

thanks. and I see that now I just forget sometimes.. today has been stressful.. but I'll fix it! :)

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Added on January 31, 2014
Last Updated on January 31, 2014
Tags: hollow, alone, broken, hidden

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Hi. I'm a girl, by the way, just saying because for some reason people tend to think I'm a guy. lol Anyways just doing what I do, writing and what not. My writing isn't deep so don't expect it to be. .. more..

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